Re: Small-town Postal Clerk Considers Inspiration by zodiac	Dovina 12.74.103.59	6-Sep-05/6:22 AM
Some good lines, but as a story, it lacks continuity. The German thing comes too late.
regarding some deleted poem...	Sasha 68.49.8.49	6-Sep-05/9:24 AM
Beautiful. A wonderful parody of the kind of crap teenagers seem to churn out. You've managed to mimic the brain-dead internet "i'm" and added that special flavor of mediocrity with such brilliantly planted cunt-spellings as "your" for "you're," "everytime" for "every time," "loyality," "royality," "deceave." In short, everything from the pervasive triteness to the rhythms limp as geriatric penis shows how ingeniously you have studied teenage doggerel and how faithfully and convincingly you can mimic and parody it. A well deserved 10.
regarding some deleted poem...	Sasha 68.49.8.49	6-Sep-05/9:30 AM
Another excellent parody. Keep up the good work!
Re: Stardust by TLRufener	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67	6-Sep-05/9:59 AM
Though it still needs some work, I think you should look at this. jsp id=102847.
Re: Parrallelogram Perry Como by Crakyamuni	T. Jonathron Remp 128.252.229.185	6-Sep-05/10:05 AM
"?in the sea / in the sea" looks like a console query
Re: Stop stalking me, eventually by T. Jonathron Remp	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67	6-Sep-05/10:06 AM
I f t h e d a m n e d s t an z a s d i d n ' t a l l s a y t h e s a m e t h i n g . . . . . . . basically.
Re: Stardust by TLRufener	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67	6-Sep-05/10:07 AM
And 18345 which doesn't need work. these are good examples of relatively simple rhyme that can easily ratchet up a poem.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67	6-Sep-05/10:26 AM
Operative word: well as in- well for water. Put him in the well. tell us about his terrible scratchings to get out, how the well crumbles above him, how you want to rescue him in the "bucket of your love". Okay thats corny. But the metaphor would make a better poem.
Re: His homage to the sea by Beyond_Dreams	Crakyamuni 131.252.182.16	6-Sep-05/10:55 AM
This reads like some childs diary entry, and it bores the life out of me. I need a nap.
Re: His homage to the sea by Beyond_Dreams	Crakyamuni 131.252.182.16	6-Sep-05/10:55 AM
also I'm an asshole.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 12.74.102.200	6-Sep-05/5:14 PM
Please omit "now" from the second line. "you're" in line 3. "act" in line 10. "deceive" in line 13. comma after unfortunately.
Re: Calm In The Face Of A Hurricane by scitz	PodPoet 68.6.188.203	6-Sep-05/10:48 PM
Please consider submitting this poem to http://hellicane.blogspot. com -- poems by, for and about the victims of Hurricane Katrina. Thanks.
Re: Katrina by jessicazee	PodPoet 68.6.188.203	6-Sep-05/10:49 PM
Please consider submitting this wonderful poem to http://hellicane.blogspot.com -- poems by, for and about the victims of Hurricane Katrina. Thanks.
Re: Calm In The Face Of A Hurricane by scitz	PodPoet 68.6.188.203	6-Sep-05/10:50 PM
Oops, that post is http://hellicane.blogspot.com
regarding some deleted poem...	Heather Dee 63.17.38.111	6-Sep-05/11:40 PM
Im sorry this is not really the type of poem that is meant for a ignorant teenage viewer like myself maybe you could come up with something a bit more oh lets see why don't you just use someone elses poem and throw a few new words in it to make it yours
Re: AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	Heather Dee 63.17.38.111	6-Sep-05/11:43 PM
I'm sorry how old were you when you wrote this?
regarding some deleted poem...	Heather Dee 63.17.38.111	7-Sep-05/1:12 AM
I think you could have put a lot more into this poem. If this really happened I am sorry for your loss.
Re: Old Friends by sliver	Heather Dee 63.17.38.111	7-Sep-05/1:14 AM
Great poem I love it!!!!!!!!!!
Re: with no words to write (v2) by nentwined	Heather Dee 63.17.38.111	7-Sep-05/1:16 AM
What????
Re: Confession of a troubled man by Hostileintent	Heather Dee 63.17.38.111	7-Sep-05/1:17 AM
Very good. Are we split personality???