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Letting Go (Free verse) by longships
The night sky glowed with summer stars, I recalled our first night of love in that strange bedroom. The first time I said, “I love you.” As we lay upon the bed. We loved, laughed and cried in the months that followed, I felt joy as never before. Alone, I remember the day we parted, the day I said, “goodbye.” Silent tears hold back behind a façade, I miss your gentle caress, our nights of passion, Words of comfort, We didn’t feel the candle flicker, Denied the truth that our love would end. An ever-smiling face carried new life into my thoughts, Her short sharpness left me breathless. My fingers stroked blonde hair, Bright blue eyes entranced me. Music flowed, I felt love’s birth within her, And still I had to go. Into the night of a thousand white eyes, I never said the words, “I love you.” As I broke from her embrace. Unsure of my feelings, I still miss her closeness in the loneliness of my bed, Alive to nothing but silence. Emotions overflowing with love, and still I cannot say. Love is selfish in the eyes of those in love, I hope for our sake, I can feel love too, As I gaze up at the stars I’m left with above.

Up the ladder: From the despairs

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7798
Posted: September 5, 2005 3:25 PM PDT; Last modified: September 5, 2005 3:25 PM PDT
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[9] Bethy @ 24.222.32.197 | 5-Sep-05/3:34 PM | Reply
Good-bye is the hardest word to say...I remember how I felt when I saw couples in love...I wrote a poem about it...its a little nasty...but...love is great...it will find you :) Bethy
[8] zodiac @ 86.108.16.108 | 6-Sep-05/3:39 AM | Reply
LOVE/ABOVE ALERT...

LOVE/ABOVE ALERT...

PLEASE TRAVEL TO http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=97622 AND AWAIT EVACUATION.
[3] Tintagiles @ 142.166.234.130 | 7-Sep-05/7:24 PM | Reply
You get a point for using the word 'Façade'. Another for giving it a cedilla. The 'Night of a thousand white eyes' gets you a third.

The rest is dreck. Start from those two things and do it again.
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