Great, but - "fascinated with chicken wings"?

This is a meta-ku if anything.

This poem does not make sense.

Good work, Amanda. I especially like the first and seventh verses (though "did be" should just be "were"). Nice.

This is really great, biteme. My only suggestion: wreathe should be wreath.

Lose some of the throwaway phrases and commentary - "But, of course, it is harder than you can imagine," "over, yet again," the last bit. Otherwise, nice.

A publisher's eye is defined by what sells. That is, what people buy, what they like. Don't make it publishers' fault.

You've got such a great "eye" for details. This is good. I bet it'll end up even better. Was the repeat of "redecorated" deliberate? Jails are seldom on main streets (other than holding cells in police stations)--even county jails are behind gates and wires and fences, so there'd be no storefronts, generally, and no sidewalks to pace. Am I taking this way more literally than you mean it? I sometimes do that; miss the metaphor.

Very nice. I haven't seen a rabbit-snare in a long time - cruel devices they are. Mate-less could be mateless, I think. Not sure I get the copper part or the wire, when twine was used before - maybe they were caught in a wire fence.

I get mixed race children out of it. It's nice whether it's read slow or fast. Have you seen the new Kanye West video?

The first three lines don't quite make sense. As it progresses, it gets better.

"Tell me more, tell me more, that you don't got her preg Tell me more, tell me more, cause he sounds like a drag" -Grease

Good work! Keep it up.

I gather this poem is about a white person who goes to a black inner-city and buys a greasy hot dog and liquor store stuff and is treated well by the black people. The black people would like when they visit the middle-class white person's town to be treated the same way but they are not. It is just not a very realistic scenario.

Change one of the "answered"s. The last stanza is great, if coming a mile off.

On a Friends rerun I saw last night, there's a morbid zoo custodian who addresses an opossum as "enigma of the trees, upside-down denizen of the night." This reminded me of that a little.

1Tell 2me 3more, 4tell 5me 6more 1A 2hai 3ku's 4some 5thing 6I 7don't 8know. 1A 2-5 3-7 4-5 5or 6so? Nice. A good commentary on the limitations of haiku-length.

"Integration" and your children makes this about schools' racial integration. The rest makes it about not letting go of the '20s. I know what you're saying. "Integration" is what needs to go.

Make the flow of both stanzas more consistant with each other.

Fastened to a desk in an old unused trailer a pen and paper cup read like memoirs, bound there by concoction of sugar and ten-year-old coffee. Written by unsteady hands on an old keyboard, and rummaged files for lost reports, thumbed frantically the company phone listing - hands that no longer toil for an annual wage but steadily hold the daily tabloid at arms length. just a suggestion.