Re: Final Dates, part 1: through gates of smoke and salt by Bill Z Bub	Bill Z Bub 99.239.12.102	6-Mar-09/6:09 AM
Deleted second half of this. Now it is incomplete, but then, it IS part one. The story isn't over, is never over until the two old ravens fly free and the the words become meaningless scratches in the clay of our existence.
Re: Going to Michigan for the weekend by <~>	nentwined 75.83.196.201	6-Mar-09/7:38 AM
That's great. I kind of wish the title was just "someplace to go" or something like...
Re: Redemption on the mat. by SupremeDreamer	Blindpoetry 68.226.178.153	6-Mar-09/8:07 PM
enjoyed the story.
regarding some deleted poem...	Bill Z Bub 99.239.12.102	6-Mar-09/10:32 PM
oof
Re: Final Dates, part 1: through gates of smoke and salt by Bill Z Bub	SupremeDreamer 75.30.177.160	7-Mar-09/2:19 PM
"Soon, or much later": Pick either _soon_, or _much later_. It gnaws at me. That aside, it's a exquisite piece that's got a lot of soul and personal depth. Nine.
Re: prove me wrong by nentwined	SupremeDreamer 75.30.177.160	7-Mar-09/2:26 PM
I think the title should be "Pessimism & Projections.". The poem is direct, simple-- lacking perhaps a little creative flare it still possesses the savage spark none-the-less. Eight.
Re: the end of the world, c'est soir by Bill Z Bub	SupremeDreamer 75.30.177.160	7-Mar-09/2:29 PM
Robotic spasms! Tsk. Seven.
Re: 2am and sober in the digital age by nentwined	SupremeDreamer 75.30.177.160	7-Mar-09/2:33 PM
I think you should play with it more.. doesn't quite snap-pop like zen. Seven.
Re: the only thing worse than living (revised, liberated) by Bill Z Bub	SupremeDreamer 75.30.177.160	7-Mar-09/2:37 PM
I lived that moment once before... and many times after. The poem doesn't feel random or lacking to me at all. Then again, I'm perhaps an altogether different breed. Ten.
Re: harvest moon by Caducus	SupremeDreamer 75.30.177.160	7-Mar-09/2:44 PM
Plenty of imagery, esoteric symbolism and word play-- unfortunately crouched in the shadows, vague near to the point of meaninglessness. Seven.
Re: Dream Samurai by Lifeboatman	SupremeDreamer 75.30.177.160	7-Mar-09/2:47 PM
Make it a glass pipe and we got something. Seven.
Re: for the slaves and the seekers by Bill Z Bub	SupremeDreamer 75.30.177.160	7-Mar-09/2:55 PM
I say we prefer rough'n dirty penetration 'cause it's better than solitary masturbation!
Re: brain cookies by nentwined	SupremeDreamer 75.30.177.160	7-Mar-09/3:00 PM
Tsk tsk. Have you ever sampled the delights of a Shit-Crumpet good sir? Its delectable flavour causes one to dismiss entirely all other confections available to the senses-- and of this I can assure you!
Re: 9 Things to Eat for Breakfast & Why by A. Nomaly	SupremeDreamer 75.30.177.160	7-Mar-09/3:05 PM
Yeah, I've endured that diet... I suspect my guts will rumble one day in revolt.
Re: To my Moneta by Bill Z Bub	SupremeDreamer 75.30.177.160	7-Mar-09/3:09 PM
Heh. How dare you be catchy in order to seduce hallmark cads to offer cash! Tsk. Here's an eight, you hallmark whore!
Re: Extra Strength VaginexII (Free curse) by Wurt Kale by Shardik	malpaso 70.233.168.141	7-Mar-09/6:40 PM
so it sounds like loss of virginity is a disease and a degradation to some uninformed people like this girl who took the extreme way out....funny as hell, O Bear God!!
Re: harvest moon by Caducus	amanda_dcosta 82.178.138.47	8-Mar-09/12:13 AM
Imagery is good, though I believe it picked up pace only by the second half.
Re: My Thoughts by amanda_dcosta	Blindpoetry 68.226.178.153	9-Mar-09/4:46 AM
you either know or you don't know.
Re: My Thoughts by amanda_dcosta	nentwined 75.83.196.201	9-Mar-09/11:20 AM
I really don't get what you're trying to convey here. Ditto Blindpoetry, really. Do you know too much or too little? Or if that's the basis of your conundrum, help me realize that better. Comes off as pretentious and empty.
Re: Redemption on the mat. by SupremeDreamer	Lifeboatman 124.106.53.170	10-Mar-09/7:00 PM
yup.. make his enemies feel pain.. 8