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9 Things to Eat for Breakfast & Why (Free verse) by A. Nomaly K.F.C. and diet coke- smelling salts of distribution, laced on and
curled, on impact backwards through chemicality and pleasure and
absolutism, following, pairing
nothing- pleasure in during, twisting of lid, pouring, blinking
avocado salad with garlic- puke in ganglia, vapors, pork intestines
meth, crystal- perfect destruction, raunchy best with porn bounce, my
love
5lbs black licorice- four sticks a day, medicine for stomach
ice cream- pregnant dreamy cake, freezer open, frost lined delight in
queen
car fumes- nylon head scarf, BMW, back muscles release into hand grip
hate- parenthetical
kisses- induction
Up the ladder:
Justin
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Pain Collector
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Posted: February 16, 2009 8:08 AM PST; Last modified: February 16, 2009 8:08 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.2682066 Overall Rank: 3942 Comments:
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Bill Z Bub @ 99.239.12.102
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16-Feb-09/5:12 PM
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Is this the new Jenny Craig diet? I find black licorice mixes well with kisses. Nine for 9.
awesome
I was just thinking though, what mixes even better with kisses, is Absinthe and tears and when your breath freezes in the air and hangs off your loves hair like icicles shining in the light of passing taxicabs.
I think your reply one-upped (no, make that ten-upped) the poem.
I didn't mean to one up anything, I was just inspired by the thought of licorice and kisses... in fact it inspired a whole prose poem of some length that I'm still working on. I have't yet decided if I'm going to post it though, as its very personal.
Personal, shmersonal--come on, we'll rip it a new one ;)
But I like what you're doing. :)
I read that as "51 lbs" black licorice and thought you really needed to lay off the meth. The rest... hmm. Doesn't really do anything for me.
Yeah, I've endured that diet... I suspect my guts will rumble one day in revolt.
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