Quite like the refrain of the first two lines. Not sure about the repetition of swell and nuts though.

cliche'd cliches tossed on to look like depth.

Talent without purpose or focus is such a sad thing to witness.

So-So. I've seen better from you.

The last time I smelled a Temptation? he spun around splashing lukewarm jerry curl juice upon my naked buttocks. Naturally, I instantly climaxed in a heap of off Navy blue jelly and fuzzy toenail clipping pearljam to suck my thumb and coo. LIKE A REAL MAN in an unreal world full of hate and 7 elevens. I'm so sad so so damn sad *sniffle*.

Surely.

I like the train metaphor, I would suggest working some more train related words in there and maybe working with the flow a little

liked the "bull moo." Maybe use another word instead of "cracked" twice

I don't know did we really all do "the best we could"? do we really breath out thanksgiving? and give thanks everytime we pray?

lovely. ;-)

I like this a lot.

entwine is one of my favorite words, but I'm sure there are other reasons I like this poem. quite fun. :)

Some parts caught my attention, others faded like night into day, but it might be more attributed to my drowsy work day. I give it a 7 all the same.

I like the message in this poem. I think you could work the lyric into something more fluid, but I like the core of it.

My favourite part is when you say Collages. urp.

565 :blink: 566. funny how quickly one can read 'zero' when not paying attention. la. I don't like the way you use the title, but... no, I don't like it. That is all. self-rewarding tens do not attract green brethren You are a zero.

Dancer and prancer and vixen it's not. The cadence is great. I like it a lot.

short and sweet

I like the last line best.

Just a bit to plaintive. And very unrealistic. Who listens to pleas?