some deleted user
on The Ebony Orchid of Theta by Shardik
2 Oct 2003, 6:03 PM
See? You came to my poetry and trashed every one. I don't think that is cool coming from a grown man who writes about poop. I think it's because you live in the woods. You need to lay off the moonshine and quit blaming all of us for your mishap on the log when you had to squeal like a pig. You should of took it like a man eh?
A path traveled again and again.
In what country is this a Sonnet in?
This is a sign of ignorance. You belong in the woods.
Don't kill me, and just sit there
And fall in love with bad health care
It's too hard to not see them stare
As I gravity bong through my tubed air
What is this? Er..nice close? Maybe try again, I'm sure you'll be writing poetry in no time! I have faith in you! Just keep your head up okay? I know rhyming is hard. ;) *Hugs*
You have issues. I'm sure Jerry Springer has an opening this fall. I'll see if he can't book you. *Hugs*
And you thought I'd like to date you? I'd rather pull my finger nails off with pliers!
I agree. Nice piece.
well, gee. what happened to you?
Voom voom.
s-4 you left out a k. on purpose probably. no. I don't mean a k as in A.K.-47 either. and you're a fam crammin toyota sienna mini van. give it up.
short and lovely
mmm
first line good
second line, did you mean decent?
third line... er, oooookay... if you say so...?
I think the poem should end with "and into the light".
the rest is a little pedagogic.
Hm. Part I is a ten. Part II and III is a seven maybe.
Yup.
This poem makes my nuts swell. Watch out for tree rats.
can you teach me how to do that? It is sooo terribly missing from my poetry. much better sitting this way it is it is. 9.5 because this was easy for you.
Pervert.
Awwwwwwwwwllllllllllll. Better hit the spank bank until then, eh? As far as the poem goes, for all of the underlying meaning to the intended, the first part sets up a great image and the slowly the poem falls apart as you leave that image and go a meandering. Puppy love will do that sort of thing to a poet. Especially a Canadian poet.