poemranker ::The rock star and the ATM by Shardik

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Haiku № 52446

The rock star and the ATM

Member since 2003 · Posted 11 Jun 2003 · Edited 11 Jun 2003 · 17 comments

With blonde & brunette He swaggers to the machine and gets declined

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17 comments

[10] Robert K Foster 11-Jun-03/3:56 PM Reply
3rd line's a bit lacking. you had the opportunity for some punch, but you slightly missed it (not to mention syllables)
[n/a] Shardik › Robert K Foster 11-Jun-03/4:01 PM Reply
hows that? what would you do here, do you think?
[10] Robert K Foster › Shardik 11-Jun-03/4:07 PM Reply
definitely better. 10 for you.
[10] Robert K Foster › Robert K Foster 11-Jun-03/4:08 PM Reply
still off on syllables, but who's counting?
[n/a] Shardik › Robert K Foster 11-Jun-03/5:43 PM Reply
de clin ed right?
[0] deleted user 12-Jun-03/1:02 PM Reply
You and your peers should have more respect for other peoples work. Making immature comments is not only stupid but shows a significant lack of character.
[n/a] Bachus › deleted user 12-Jun-03/1:20 PM Reply
Go fuck your mom's face with potato peeler James. Submit or shut up outsider. Or put your money where your mouth is. Maybe your friends should go write at stillsuckingmomstit.com or you should start your own website called hi i'm Jame's John K.s older brother, and I do not have a blowjob super glued to my chin that's my Hummel collection.
[n/a] Bachus › deleted user 12-Jun-03/1:27 PM Reply
Also, significant lack of character is an understatement James. It shows plenty of character out of lack of any character, just not in that midwestern "hey ya'll let's be cock suckers and blow smoke up eachother's ass psuedo poets, and weekend poets (because that's what you and your friends are James)" way you and your friends are used to. But once again let's take a look at where we are at James. poemranker.com. I don't specificly see a bumpersticker on this 'vehicle of poetical rankings' that states "but be especially nice if they are especially stupid" do you asshole?
[n/a] deleted user › Bachus 12-Jun-03/10:08 PM Reply
Bachus, is something up?
[n/a] Shardik › deleted user 13-Jun-03/3:45 PM Reply
What do you mean?
[n/a] deleted user › Shardik 13-Jun-03/5:05 PM Reply
nevermind.
[n/a] Bachus 12-Jun-03/1:16 PM Reply
Go fuck your mom's face with potato peeler James. Submit or shut up outsider.
[0] deleted user 12-Jun-03/1:37 PM Reply
I will not submit any of my work to the likes of you. You people are an insult to every true poet that comes here. I do not claim to be great nor even good...but those who can't show respect; as far as I'm concerned can burn in hell.
[n/a] Bachus › deleted user 12-Jun-03/1:54 PM Reply
At your age who cares, if you are only fifteen you have nothing to lose. Because James, I gurantee, you are not the next Rimbaud, so submit your poems. I'm 28, I will read your 15 year old poetry taking into account that you are fifteen, you have my word, but rest assured if it's shit I will laugh James, I will cackle madly because that's why I personally come to poemranker James, to cackle nude and to read your shit to feel cleaner in reading my shit.
[n/a] Bachus 12-Jun-03/1:40 PM Reply
Yes, James, I agree that must be why my fish tank whistles three times a day for tea and my house is made of scoria. I'm in HELL! Good god and I thought those were just ugly talking birds shitting on my patio umbrella?
[0] deleted user 2-Oct-03/5:54 PM Reply
This is a sign of ignorance. You belong in the woods.
[n/a] horus8 › deleted user 2-Oct-03/7:10 PM Reply
Why?