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The rock star and the ATM (Haiku) by Shardik With blonde & brunette
He swaggers to the machine
and gets declined
Up the ladder:
Voodoo on channel 13
Down the ladder:
Greek Tragedy#1
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.7272725
Posted: June 11, 2003 3:52 PM PDT; Last modified: June 11, 2003 4:01 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.3636365 Overall Rank: 3283 Comments:
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Robert K Foster @ 66.66.214.253
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11-Jun-03/3:56 PM
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3rd line's a bit lacking. you had the opportunity for some punch, but you slightly missed it (not to mention syllables)
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Shardik @ 24.126.113.154
> Robert K Foster
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11-Jun-03/4:01 PM
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hows that? what would you do here, do you think?
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Robert K Foster @ 66.66.214.253
> Shardik
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11-Jun-03/4:07 PM
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definitely better. 10 for you.
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Robert K Foster @ 66.66.214.253
> Robert K Foster
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11-Jun-03/4:08 PM
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still off on syllables, but who's counting?
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Shardik @ 24.126.113.154
> Robert K Foster
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11-Jun-03/5:43 PM
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de clin ed right?
You and your peers should have more respect for other peoples work. Making immature comments is not only stupid but shows a significant lack of character.
Go fuck your mom's face with potato peeler James. Submit or shut up outsider. Or put your money where your mouth is. Maybe your friends should go write at stillsuckingmomstit.com or you should start your own website called hi i'm Jame's John K.s older brother, and I do not have a blowjob super glued to my chin that's my Hummel collection.
Also, significant lack of character is an understatement James. It shows plenty of character out of lack of any character, just not in that midwestern "hey ya'll let's be cock suckers and blow smoke up eachother's ass psuedo poets, and weekend poets (because that's what you and your friends are James)" way you and your friends are used to. But once again let's take a look at where we are at James. poemranker.com. I don't specificly see a bumpersticker on this 'vehicle of poetical rankings' that states "but be especially nice if they are especially stupid" do you asshole?
Bachus, is something up?
What do you mean?
nevermind.
Go fuck your mom's face with potato peeler James. Submit or shut up outsider.
I will not submit any of my work to the likes of you. You people are an insult to every true poet that comes here. I do not claim to be great nor even good...but those who can't show respect; as far as I'm concerned can burn in hell.
At your age who cares, if you are only fifteen you have nothing to lose. Because James, I gurantee, you are not the next Rimbaud, so submit your poems. I'm 28, I will read your 15 year old poetry taking into account that you are fifteen, you have my word, but rest assured if it's shit I will laugh James, I will cackle madly because that's why I personally come to poemranker James, to cackle nude and to read your shit to feel cleaner in reading my shit.
Yes, James, I agree that must be why my fish tank whistles three times a day for tea and my house is made of scoria. I'm in HELL! Good god and I thought those were just ugly talking birds shitting on my patio umbrella?
This is a sign of ignorance. You belong in the woods.
Why?
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