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The rock star and the ATM (Haiku) by Shardik

With blonde & brunette He swaggers to the machine and gets declined

Robert K Foster 11-Jun-03/3:56 PM
3rd line's a bit lacking. you had the opportunity for some punch, but you slightly missed it (not to mention syllables)




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