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On the Occasion (Free verse) by tadpole
Guardian Big-Hearted And strong of will Guide me long Keep me true Never abandon me While this earth is my home Ever from birth You serve anew Many thanks to you, and still more To Him from Whom you've come Of gratitude oft'n overdue

Up the ladder: Beyond Love
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.2727275
Weighted score: 5.6363635
Overall Rank: 2168
Posted: October 2, 2003 2:01 PM PDT; Last modified: October 2, 2003 2:02 PM PDT
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[7] J.B. Manning @ 129.44.35.24 | 2-Oct-03/3:23 PM | Reply
I like the last line best.
[10] sliver @ 65.178.224.248 | 2-Oct-03/8:48 PM | Reply
You must be Native American.What Occasion may I ask?
[n/a] tadpole @ 64.12.96.234 > sliver | 3-Oct-03/10:56 AM | Reply
The Occasion is the Feast of our Guardian Angels.
[7] richa @ 81.178.250.183 | 3-Oct-03/8:51 AM | Reply
not sure about the rhyme at the end of each verse, too many words seem to interfere in between, such as whom and you.

overall pleasant,
[10] electroman1979 @ 198.81.26.46 | 7-Oct-03/9:32 AM | Reply
good poem, and sliver, can't you see that that was about the angels? i knew rigth away, open your eyes :P~
[10] sliver @ 63.190.64.11 > electroman1979 | 10-Oct-03/4:17 PM | Reply
listen here bud. you know better than to question my intelligence, I don't have any.
[7] dancin_n_da_moonlite @ 205.188.116.139 | 13-Mar-05/1:40 PM | Reply
this is nice - 7 -
megan
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