INTRANSIT
on The Santa Anna's fire and red sun by Bachus
29 Oct 2003, 6:44 PM
Good job boning the sun. sans lube, sans foreplay, sans sandals. always. no. I don't like sloppy seconds. thanks anyway.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
29 Oct 2003, 7:11 PM
Fabulous ! much better then i could have done. Sorry i didn't comment earlier. of course ~> 10/10
I see no organicity between gloves or Cliff Richardson besides the Chinese. Therefore! You must be Gay-Ming towards something, but what I wonder?
Gaut in the left tit?
I can feel this. It burns,reminders of the heat of Iowa.
And the ages of Adso. I accept not failure,
I scoff at mediocrity, And I allow the forge to push me away with the heat of it's bellowz.
This is Great!- to see someone on here with teeth! I'd give more, but heres 10.
Lordy, you are robust. Will you sit on my mustache for a nickle?
This poem sounds really good when you persuade a slightly deaf disabled old man, port-sodden like so many of his ancient tribe, to recite it directly into your ear canal using a method of recitation known as "shouting".
"to the tune of "All You Need is Love" by Cliff Richard"
Is this a joke!?????!?!??! LOL ASL?!?!?!
The aforesaid song was sung not by Sir Clifford but rather by the Small Rolling Beatle Kink Faces.
"I can accept closure,
But not indecent exposure."
These two lines are sheer genius. The rest is cack.
Change the last line to this:
"God sent me an angel, I just call her Motherfucker"
Such an amendment would serve to lend the poem one more layer of polytextual poignality.
Had you been "deflowered" yet?
OMG LOL ASL!??!??!??!!!
Stunning. This piece works really well when recited in a heavy Indian accent. -10-
Change the last word from "soul" to "ass". -10-
Making love to a child
Starts out by just a kiss
I'm not sure I approve of your pederastic activities, sir!!!!!!
What the world needs now
Is gloves sweet gloves
Dandy.