nice interplay of past, present, future. certain lines, like "the wide horizon of history" are a bit too melodramatic for the sort of feel i think you're going for, but overall a very agreeable piece.

pleasant. i like the starting tone, almost a storytelling type of voice. but as the image develops the tone gets much more formal. the two stanzas that start with 'rebuke arose' switch from present tense to past, as well as from concrete imagery to abstract. they interrupt the story's flow more than they add.

hauntingly mournful -

I felt the ice

harsh

who owns God? interesting work, though your syllabic form is off. if the 5-7-5 were intact this would be senryu.

the first half is funny. the second half is just gratuitous, doesn't really add anything.

good idea but this could be a lot more concise.

the first two stanzas i like. the word loneliness stands out a bit as telling, not showing, in an otherwise pretty good third stanza. the last three lines really aren't necessary, and the poem would be much better were they omitted.

i like.

this is very prosey. I feel like the first four lines are not really necessary at all, and the last four don't connect very well with the imagery in-between. That said, the middle 8 lines are very nice.

the middle stanza is completely unnecessary. remove it and this piece will be much stronger.

Is she being executed?

i would edit it, but then lose all ur comments... so it stays as is. but thanx for the feedback!

it's a barren landscape. i love: brimming with storm but no rejoicing. it makes no sense, but sings.

There are some misconceptions here, that make the zealous hodge podge verses sting even more. God did not make our lives to be worthless. His enemies may have killed Jesus, but according to the New Testament, this was part of God's plan... How else could he have fulfilled the passion? And lastly, because I want to go to sleep, you actually think we could actually hurt the greatest grandest architect...You think it matters if we believe or not?? Only to our own faith... God exists regardless of us, and He or She or whatever our creator is, does not need our votes.

i'm sorry, it's just not well written.

I hope this is about a real mountain experience. It sounds like it is, but you hedge too much. Bring it closer to what ordinary people understand, and give up some of the weird language. Sounds like a good story.

Check the spelling and get rid of the duplications.

Great imagery, great rhythm, great read. It deserves a 10 to cancel out that pesky 0.