Sappy crap you know! Too guided and unemotional. I was hoping for a better poem with such a philosophical/flexible title. -Disappointing-

Furthermore, the only adjective used was *tragic*, which should be replaced anyway. MacFan has died a little today. B^(

Scenic and Inspiring. Next to purity it was.

An ode to the sleeping beauty, per se.

I take it "geek from Trinity" refers to -=Dark_Angel=-, and that I can add this to my ever-growing list of -=Dark_Angel=- tribute poemes?

Tea tree oil doesn't smell very good. Otherwise a nice fantasy and/or picture.

Please correct: "eachother" "Out love" "BANG!,"

as a strategy to winning one's love - destined to result in a lonely life of conversing with small birds. a nice clipping best kept for a larger poem?

The language in this is ... problematic. Having said that, maybe there's a market for it someplace?

A nice sentiment, and perhaps strongly felt - but too easy.

Is this based on our mutual military friend with a large head and saddlebags overflowing with corpulent fat?

I just couldn't get my arms around this one. Maybe some line breaks, maybe some compartmentalization - dunno.

I thought this was going to be the pilot of a TV series about a crack team of secret agents who burst into meth labs in the middle of the night and adminster instant divorces to all the evildoers inside. I was wildly excited for a brief, sodden moment.

I think you have too many "that" s. I'd dump them from: insults that they story that I'm reality that I wish comfort that I lost and the "which" from: ending which I wish options that no longer seem to exist ->options no longer existing the hatred, which is all -> the hatred and Good stuff though. I feel it.

Poached

a lyric?

Did you recite this aloud as you left?

you are = you're

This verges on a Robert Frost taco, but maintains guacamole.

Nice. But what is A mosaic of tiny infinite heavens?