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D.I.V.O.R.C.E. (Free verse) by elizabethann D is for the darkness that covers my broken home
I is for the insults that they scream so loud
V is for the versions of the story that I'm told
O is for the options that no longer seem to exist
R is for the reality that I wish would go away
C is the comfort that I lost because of this
E is for the ending which I wish I'd never know
And D.I.V.O.R.C.E. is for the hatred, which is all I have been shown.
Up the ladder:
The Box
Down the ladder:
See the Sun Overhead and Believe
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Posted: April 26, 2004 3:02 PM PDT; Last modified: April 26, 2004 3:02 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.9205313 Overall Rank: 9459 Comments:
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215
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26-Apr-04/3:08 PM
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I thought this was going to be the pilot of a TV series about a crack team of secret agents who burst into meth labs in the middle of the night and adminster instant divorces to all the evildoers inside. I was wildly excited for a brief, sodden moment.
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zodiac @ 152.18.129.57
> -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
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26-Apr-04/7:57 PM
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It could be Detective Ironshoe's Vast Organization of Roving Crack Enforcers.
I think you have too many "that" s. I'd dump them from:
insults that they story that I'm reality that I wish comfort that I lost and the "which" from: ending which I wish options that no longer seem to exist ->options no longer existing the hatred, which is all -> the hatred and Good stuff though. I feel it. 175 view(s)
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