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D.I.V.O.R.C.E. (Free verse) by elizabethann

D is for the darkness that covers my broken home I is for the insults that they scream so loud V is for the versions of the story that I'm told O is for the options that no longer seem to exist R is for the reality that I wish would go away C is the comfort that I lost because of this E is for the ending which I wish I'd never know And D.I.V.O.R.C.E. is for the hatred, which is all I have been shown.

hypatia 26-Apr-04/6:58 PM
I think you have too many "that" s. I'd dump them from:
insults that they
story that I'm
reality that I wish
comfort that I lost
and the "which" from: ending which I wish
options that no longer seem to exist ->options no longer existing
the hatred, which is all -> the hatred and
Good stuff though. I feel it.




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