Stark and haunting words. The image of sailing "upon gold" is truly, sublimely inspired... this will perhaps remain with me for the rest of my life. Wonderful. -6-

Beautifully constructed. As usual, I cannot find a single fault with your work. Thank you. -6-

Witty, insightful. Perhaps one of the most important poemes written in the last 20 years. -6-

For dozens of reasons, I don't think the inverse square law is really the one you want to use here.

Nope^infinity.

How do you "satisfy a fact"?

Hilarious, truly; this had me wiping snot of my laptop.

Why does the poem have a line through it?

Congratulations on posting the worst title on this site since SupremeDreamer's "Ravings of a Dreamer"!

Are you some kind of automaton churning out small satchels of snot garnished guff?

The title of this poem implies one of two things - firstly a pie full of fingers - that would be grotesque, or secondly some form of instruction where you would have to literally finger a pie. The poem however appears to be about putting a child to bed. This poem is confused and poorly written and you may not have noticed but their is a large irrelevant line in the middle. This all leads me to believe that you are a stultified quim.

I think it becomes a little redundant, oblong as it were toward the end. I like the first stanza. But from there is seems to drag a little. the ending is powerful but it feels a trifle long. i would take an e or 2 out of the final line, and perhaps add a bit more repetition to the middle.

best poem i ever read. I wouldnt change a thing...0

(A women)?

The title and the first three words made me believe this lyric was about the coversion of bile into feaces in the lower abdomanal tract. Reading the rest of this sorry excuse of a lyric led me to believe that you spend a lot of time playing warhammer in a darkened room with your imaginary friend Peter.

post apocalyptic? or is it just about the futility of conflict?

"ravaged by the loom" Dear god -- this can only be the same loom from my poeme ''The Weaver's Curse''. Something must be done to stop this *warped* loomdividual's loompage before the situation *spindles* out of control!!!!!!1111111111

"Could it be, as Rush Limbaugh mentioned in passing on a recent broadcast, that the perpetrators of the alleged crime are homosexuals? If that's the case, maybe the motivation for their activities was far different than from what has been discussed in the media's wall to wall coverage of this incident. If these individuals are homosexuals, maybe they were getting stimulated by looking at naked Iraqis in sexually provocative positions. Of course, as Limbaugh said because of the military's "don't ask, don't tell" policy concerning homosexuality we'll probably never know the answer, but I think the scenario is still definitely worth considering. After all, it would answer why the alleged activities took place and it would also provide a solution to the really bizarre question as to why pictures were taken of the humiliating and sexually suggestive poses. Why, you ask? Many people believe that homosexuals have a much greater potential than heterosexuals to be sexual predators. In addition, a sizeable number of sexually dysfunctional individuals (aka sexual predators) take pictures of their illicit acts. It gives them an opportunity to glory in their "conquest" as they visually relive their sickening activities. But here's an interesting scenario to ponder that Limbaugh also mentioned. If this was ever found out to be the case, what would those liberal defenders of homosexual marriage and "gay" rights do? Would liberal Democrats have to adopt an different attitude to this situation and quit their incessant criticism of the Bush Administration and the liberation of Iraq? It's definitely something worth thinking about. After all, if the individuals involved in these alleged crimes were homosexual, or there was a homosexual element involved, who can blame them. They would just be acting out their natural biological inclinations, right? And (so the theory goes) who could fault them for that because their actions would have been a result of the way they were born, not in any way the volitional actions of a lifestyle choice."

"the days go on without her...and she dreams of yesterday" makes no sense. "she's never had true love she's never had a life she's never had a family she never had money but she never had greed and she dreams of yesterday" makes no sense. "every day is dark and gloomy...and she dreams of yesterday" makes no sense. "she believes in God and an afterlife but she dreams of yesterday" makes no sense.

Yes, but that's what happens when you stay on this site too long.