This is better than the last one of yours that I read. I think you just need to expand your vocabulary a little bit and you'll be okay.

Dialysis Tone After years of being renally refused* I wish my kidney'd been transfused** Fil'tring here all alone I listen to the dialysis tone lol * refused a kidney transplant ** by which is meant, transplanted

Not bad, but I don't know if you should call this a lyric.

jesus

I'm sorry but I don't vote on lewds -no vote-

You think next time you might pick good poets?

"Thy who takes in, gets taken." "Thy" means "your". You fail.

[X] Self obsessed

Intransit, thank you.

Sorry, Haiku(s)

Perhaps you just got tired of being an enabler? Good job.

Yea, a little overwritten, but so is almost everything I've ever confined in ink. Still, I like it.

Suggestion: Listening to the phone's monotone.

I love your poetry so much. I'm a romantic and so much of your work just makes me feel all warm and mushy inside lol. This poem blends together so smoothly and creates this wonderful sensation of complete bliss. I love it!

*speechless*

Awww...:'( I can relate so much to poems of this sort... ~10~deserves no less...

I like this poem, but it just doesn't seem to flow as well as the others. It seems as though you were pushing it a little too much.

Yawn.

*breechesless*

hehe... 10.. 'nuff said