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Consumer (Free verse) by nothingtoanyone
For the first time in all the years that this has been going on I have noticed it. It was in your eyes, eating the person that lay behind them consuming you slowly. Consuming you? No, not you but it is consuming the consumer. Thy who takes in, gets taken. -AND- You have been taken, stolen from me by the liquid that fills you veins. The liquid that you take in, consume more then the air around you. Seeing you like this kills me faster, speeding up the speed of death that is already traveling inside me.

Up the ladder: Wretch
Down the ladder: argentina

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.3333333
Weighted score: 4.8013287
Overall Rank: 11124
Posted: May 11, 2004 9:09 PM PDT; Last modified: May 11, 2004 9:09 PM PDT
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[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 163.1.146.225 | 12-May-04/4:36 PM | Reply
"Thy who takes in, gets taken."

"Thy" means "your". You fail.
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