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Swan on Willow Lake (Haiku) by Caducus Sailing upon gold
Through reeds which bow before you
Jealous blackbirds caw
Up the ladder:
For Ike
Down the ladder:
O say, can you see?
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Posted: May 12, 2004 12:44 PM PDT; Last modified: May 12, 2004 12:44 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.0 Overall Rank: 1278 Comments:
Hilarious, truly; this had me wiping snot of my laptop.
Crow In a Stagnant Pond by Frivilous Mediocrity
Oh crow in the mire! Why won't you float nigger Oh Black bird in quick sand If you weren't so black I'd lend a hand.
I think this is how a haiku should be written. The first image and then a different image (the blackbirds) linked to the first.
Would leave out jealous though. Haikus are about imagery more than most other forms. Image without need for explanation. 316 view(s)
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