Re: a comment on Patterns by aliena |
15-May-04/10:13 AM |
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Re: this bitter heart by New Life Drug |
15-May-04/9:46 AM |
You are under arrest by the Gay Police for rhyming death/breath twice and apart/heart three times in the same poem. Each of these rhymes is exhausted and more tired of overuse than the most attractive of Nevada whores. Therefore, for the sake of these poor rhymes (and they are poor) you are sentenced to wear the -0- of shame.
You have the right...no, wait...the requirement to remain silent
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Re: Patterns by aliena |
15-May-04/9:40 AM |
The last lines resemble a very badly delivered corny speech to a losing highschool football team.
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Re: A Year Later (edited a bit) by Sasha |
15-May-04/7:27 AM |
in case you ask why I edited and trashed all your votes it was because the spelling errors in this villanelle threatened to send it to the bow'ls of Pinsky's horrid Inferno.
Please feel free to tell me what a wackjob I am
Thank you
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Re: a comment on AIDS in a Glass by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
14-May-04/3:52 PM |
How sad and extremely familiarly pathetic
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Re: untitled: dedicated to my soldier/husband by SweetJuliet10 |
14-May-04/3:32 PM |
Now now it wasn't nice of you to delete my comment like that. I mean, I'd just re-post it, but I can't because I don't remember: partly beccause your poem had a mental black-out effect similar to the pressure of a steel baseball bat when applied to the skull of a living person. O well.
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Re: death makes me vain! by SweetJuliet10 |
14-May-04/12:01 PM |
Painful and hell only rhyme when Dante is turning over in his grave to the tune of Robert Pinsky's consonantal clip-clop crap.
Now, about the poem. Wait, it's not a poem.
If I have to read the words
life and knife just one more time
Then I'll go into convulsions
More than at this very rhyme
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Re: All Square by Enkidu |
14-May-04/11:57 AM |
What in the name of......
I suppose this fits into the category of bad ascii art. I'm not sure though.
No matter how I read this, sideways, diagonally, top to bottom, bottom to top, circularly, or after after a few shots of smirnov, this still doesen't make much more sense than the pimple on my bum.
Maybe a few BableFish iterations will improve it.
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Re: The Plea of the Beneathednessified (New poetry scheme!) by Enkidu |
14-May-04/11:53 AM |
beneathednessified makes me think of a cross between George Bush on a saturday night after seven beers, and e.e. cummings on a very bad day
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Re: a comment on feelings of the inside by SweetJuliet10 |
14-May-04/11:51 AM |
and take some prozac while you're at it
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Re: Tasha:dedicated to my dear friend by SweetJuliet10 |
14-May-04/11:48 AM |
How touching. It makes me want to cry tears of suffocation at the rhyme heart/apart. Then I'll die.
one day we will meet again best friends me and you would be better off with two commas as you can see lack of punctuation makes one sound either like a non-anglophone frenchman reading the King James Bible or like a a somnambulant George Bush.
Here's a -4- to take the pain away
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Re: Tomorrow by Quarton |
13-May-04/7:57 PM |
The fog is a veil to hide our kisses....etc.
Gag me
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Re: a comment on Domingos by candaliesa |
13-May-04/7:48 PM |
I should go stand in the corner now?
No. Seriously (and in the stretched sense of the word "seriously") Dryden, Pope, and Poe and the rest of the good olde boyes did well. However they were actually good poets. The author of this is a good poet if and only if it is also true that a gigantic cicada just sucked my brains out and ejected them as fecal excrement into the bow'ls of outer space.
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Re: Random by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
13-May-04/7:15 PM |
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Re: goofy poem to prove I'm not morbid (Ode to an Onion) by greym0on |
13-May-04/6:49 PM |
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Re: a comment on A Year Later (edited a bit) by Sasha |
13-May-04/6:48 PM |
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Re: a comment on Domingos by candaliesa |
13-May-04/6:42 PM |
it certainly isn't I should get a helmet for the next time I comment on a poem like this. It'll hurt less
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Re: a comment on A Year Later (edited a bit) by Sasha |
13-May-04/6:38 PM |
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Re: a comment on A Year Later (edited a bit) by Sasha |
13-May-04/6:24 PM |
Winter snow came BEFORE may!!
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Re: Domingos by candaliesa |
13-May-04/6:18 PM |
AABB rhyme schemes hurt me and cause my forehead to slam the desk in siezure.
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