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this bitter heart (Free verse) by New Life Drug
I settled down inside your lonely heart (there were)dagger points from past loves that x-rays couldn't tell apart There was bleeding inside your freezing veins of death I was choking not knowing if I was taking my last breath Whether its made of gold or made of stone its all I want its all I know This contraption... the cause of love I want to stare into the color of your eyes seeping into seeping into me The only way to get there is to go deep inside down to the core down to the sores I tried to get up outside your screaming heart but I was trapped in obscured walls so fixed they wouldnt rip apart There was burning outside the imbrued organ of death I was entangled feeling strangled and kissed goodbye my final breath Whether its made of gold or made of stone its all I want its all I know This contraption the cause of love.. An apparatus so divisive A natural weapon of choice Tell me, who will be decisive? your bitter heart, or do I have a voice? in my destiny because the circumstances dont look so well for me Theres more than a body part to this bitter heart [thats all i got]

Up the ladder: Actor
Down the ladder: THE GAME

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.7
Weighted score: 5.85
Overall Rank: 1582
Posted: May 15, 2004 12:05 AM PDT; Last modified: May 15, 2004 12:09 AM PDT
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Comments:
[9] titan69 @ 213.48.74.43 | 15-May-04/12:43 AM | Reply
love it good work!
[9] francis nor capule @ 203.131.149.245 | 15-May-04/4:40 AM | Reply
yeah, sometimes i'd like to do that too...
[0] Sasha @ 69.138.236.63 | 15-May-04/9:46 AM | Reply
You are under arrest by the Gay Police for rhyming death/breath twice and apart/heart three times in the same poem. Each of these rhymes is exhausted and more tired of overuse than the most attractive of Nevada whores. Therefore, for the sake of these poor rhymes (and they are poor) you are sentenced to wear the -0- of shame.

You have the right...no, wait...the requirement to remain silent
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 > Sasha | 15-May-04/1:14 PM | Reply
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[n/a] New Life Drug @ 69.106.248.241 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 15-May-04/10:29 PM | Reply
haaaaahaahah thank you
[n/a] New Life Drug @ 69.106.248.241 > Sasha | 15-May-04/10:29 PM | Reply
fuck the po po yo.
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