Domingos

Member since 2004 · Posted 13 May 2004 · 8 comments

It's been a year to the day. That you said goodbye and went Gods way. You left behind many broken hearts. With you gone it was hard to restart. I remember the good times that we had. Yet the memories seem to make me sad. I love you so much, my uncle, my dear. If only once more we could have you here. Telling us to be strong, not to cry. "I'll be okay, I promise, no lie". Saying you "love us to no end". We may not share your blood, but we are kin. We shouldn't mourn the day you past! We should remember the times you made us laugh!!! ---cmp--- 8/28/03

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[6] Sasha 13-May-04/6:18 PM Reply

AABB rhyme schemes hurt me and cause my forehead to slam the desk in siezure.

[10] sliver › Sasha 13-May-04/6:31 PM Reply

Ralph Waldo Emerson,Shelley, Poe, Coleridge,Wordsworth's 'I wandered lonely as a cloud',Pope, Isaac Watts, Dryden, etc etc.
You beat your head alone as you shy from all the best. Is there any rhyme scheme which doesn't cause suicidal tendencies? Perhaps poetry isn't healthy for you?

[6] Sasha › sliver 13-May-04/6:42 PM Reply

it certainly isn't I should get a helmet for the next time I comment on a poem like this. It'll hurt less

[10] sliver › Sasha 13-May-04/6:46 PM Reply

I didn't necessarily mean for my words to hurt, any more than all those others.

[6] Sasha › sliver 13-May-04/7:48 PM Reply

I should go stand in the corner now?

No. Seriously (and in the stretched sense of the word "seriously") Dryden, Pope, and Poe and the rest of the good olde boyes did well. However they were actually good poets. The author of this is a good poet if and only if it is also true that a gigantic cicada just sucked my brains out and ejected them as fecal excrement into the bow'ls of outer space.

[10] sliver › Sasha 13-May-04/8:06 PM Reply

Here is this Bow'ls thing again. What? And as far as this poem goes, it says what he/she means. It is an expression of their emotions. That is what poetry is to me. I wouldn't say that my ink stains are "good", but they help with my emotions. Read my poem all there (and comment), that is my attempt to say the same message as candaliesa, but different, forstein?

[n/a] zodiac › sliver 14-May-04/3:34 AM Reply

How about ABbACDBACDBbABCDDCB?

[10] sliver 13-May-04/6:34 PM Reply

My poem 'All There' was written for my father on his birthday, also the 1 year anniversary of his death. I can feel your pain, well expressed.