| Re: The Mushrooms' Song by zodiac |
22-Feb-05/7:55 PM |
Revisiting this, I have to say I think it is brilliant. That last stanza is quite surprising and reveals a lot..,the way the cat is sucked in, in a comparatively short instant...the mushrooms growing at a completetly negligible pace. And it feels so dank.
Anyway, I love it.
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| Re: a comment on Disable by blacksoul |
22-Feb-05/7:01 PM |
The only reason that dovina is defending, is that she is a plagiarist too. She plagiarized me, of all the hacks in the world to choose from.
I doubt she will have the guts to even deny it. Let's see if she tries.
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| Re: Pennies by woodstock20000 |
22-Feb-05/6:47 PM |
Do you really want that many periods in the last 5 lines?
I kind of like it, against my will.
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| Re: a comment on Getting Pumped Up to Get Laid by PodPoet |
22-Feb-05/6:39 PM |
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Layed is awful. I have never even seen "layed" before, not that that makes it awful, hehehehehheehehehehe, hit him with your hardest marshmallow, still laughing at that one.
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| Re: The Plane of War by MacFrantic |
22-Feb-05/8:06 AM |
and the wormy piles of colons strewn across the land
glistened
like thin wet rats
and nobody listened.
the side of the bus read "fuck off" and so i did,
and spilled my drippings
on the bloody red madness of the day
in a skirt
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| Re: Hunger by Dovina |
22-Feb-05/7:31 AM |
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| Re: Hunter Thompson, In The Off Beat Chance Of Cunnilingus by horus8 |
22-Feb-05/7:17 AM |
not too carefully, I hope, or that 300 dismissal lingers, smoking a camel, right around the corner!
I wonder about the words "venerated" and "fiasco", and whether you might not find something that crystalizes what you mean there a bit better.
This was an absolute delight to read. It purred down the screen, finely oiled, smelling vaguely of Big Mac droppings and fat cubans.
Your hair was dark and short. Nice touch. Just excellent writing and a 10
When are you due back to AP? Are you even coming back? I hope so. Things have grown a bit dull in your absence, and in the void you left, I am being attacked by all the illiterate teeny boppers, "U R an Ass. Do you get off mAkIng fun of kids with ADD?" etc etc etc...Also, I have some problems with the sound on my PC, so can't listen to the music you send me. Shame that. Trying to remedy
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| Re: Getting Pumped Up to Get Laid by PodPoet |
22-Feb-05/7:07 AM |
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| Re: Boiled by INTRANSIT |
22-Feb-05/7:04 AM |
the whole metaphor is a bit silly, and that is good.
and that rhyme at the end is funny, heart to choke
never to bloom artichoke. I like artichoke hearts in a nice oily pasta salad, virgin and salami, some garden fresh cherry tomatoes and buffalo mozzarella, fresh of course.
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| Re: Disable by blacksoul |
22-Dec-04/1:51 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Dictionary Lesson by Dovina |
19-Nov-04/4:48 PM |
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I have to disagree with your apparent assessment of Zodiac's poems. If you actually READ them, I think you will find they do not lack feeling, nor art.
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| Re: Feminist? by RGSsparky |
16-Nov-04/2:02 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Ash by horus8 |
13-Nov-04/10:15 AM |
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yah, he was fucking with some chick who plagiarized and he was pointing it out rather too vigorously for their tastes, it seems. They eventually banned her for good, in essence, proving his point, after they banned him course.
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| Re: a comment on An Afternoon Walk by Dovina |
12-Nov-04/3:35 PM |
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To quote the inimitable Jroday, for all future students of the man's profoundly influencial poetry..."truth is more than a mental exercise"
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| Re: a comment on An Afternoon Walk by Dovina |
12-Nov-04/12:32 PM |
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| Re: Ash by horus8 |
12-Nov-04/8:25 AM |
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hey. WHen is your ban from AP up? that place is starting to scare me... DP roberson has been banned too. Bulletin threads are being censored left and right.
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| Re: Walk in a dream (an ode to self help poems) by Bachus |
10-Nov-04/7:46 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Ebony shadow by Twiggy77 |
10-Nov-04/10:48 AM |
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sorry, I meant ~~~-=Learnede_Behavioure=-~~~
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| Re: a comment on Ebony shadow by Twiggy77 |
10-Nov-04/10:47 AM |
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when you are born, you know nothing. Therefore farting is learned behaviour.
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| Re: a comment on An Afternoon Walk by Dovina |
10-Nov-04/10:43 AM |
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