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Ebony shadow

by Twiggy77

Member since 2004 · Posted 10 Nov 2004 · 11 comments

My shadow seems darker than ever before A face-less mime-artist, in ebony clothes Eternally sentanced to mimic it's host Enslaved throughout life to return as my ghost If darkness could speak, my shadow would scream As it repeats the demeanour of pathetic routines My mirrored accomplice impossibly seems To live at my side, but haunt me in dreams The lessons of life have taught us to hate We've kept pace with pain, but love's running late Escaping the world with the drugs that we take My shadow of morals questions my fate

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[n/a] Twiggy77 10-Nov-04/6:38 AM Reply
Guess who was depressed for a while.
[9] poetryman 10-Nov-04/8:34 AM Reply
sentenced, but other than that, twas good, especially the last stanza, only we allow the lessons of life to teach us to hate, as I'm a firm believer that hate is learned behavior.....
[n/a] Stephen Robins › poetryman 10-Nov-04/9:01 AM Reply
In under 50 words give me one example to prove your arguement that hate is "learned behaviour". Please also explain who the first teacher of hate was. Then flush yourself down the nearest toilet.
[9] poetryman › Stephen Robins 10-Nov-04/9:56 AM Reply
too easy, when you are born, you know nothing, therefore it's learned....I see you have also learned good people skills, your parents must truly be proud
[4] edpeterson › poetryman 10-Nov-04/10:47 AM Reply
when you are born, you know nothing. Therefore farting is learned behaviour.
[4] edpeterson › edpeterson 10-Nov-04/10:48 AM Reply
sorry, I meant ~~~-=Learnede_Behavioure=-~~~
[n/a] Stephen Robins › poetryman 10-Nov-04/10:55 AM Reply
You are colossal dunce, at school you probably thought you were smart but were actually massively bullied for being such an outspoken bellend. You also probaly called your parents (if you knew them) by their first names. I knew when I came from the womb how to cry implying I knew how to be upset/demand my mothers massive drooping breast be pressed to my mouth. I also know that having been born as a Christian that the Lord had imbued me with hatred of all Islams and Sikhs. You live in some ghastly double world where there aren't such things as predetermination or souls. In other words you are a soggy dollop of failure on the chin of a gigantic quendo.

[9] poetryman › Stephen Robins 10-Nov-04/11:32 AM Reply
actually as a child in school, I said very little, and yeah I did wear the dunce cap a few times, and kicked little snotty ass boys like you up and down the football field for an outlet, then found out that writing was better. As for your hatred towards the islamic faith, how christian of you, my next door neighbor is a muslim and probably the nicest family I've ever met, happy hating
[n/a] Stephen Robins › poetryman 11-Nov-04/3:37 AM Reply
LOL.
[8] sliver 10-Nov-04/11:57 PM Reply
The shadow of THIS mortal CONSTANTLY questions my fate, But it's all about morals anyway! Right?
A few miscpewings. elliminate the dash between mime artist. Other than that???
[8] sliver 11-Nov-04/12:00 AM Reply
O.K. NOW I see that yer a Brit, Haven't voted, or commented on anything. read read read. comment, visit, learn. Welcome.