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Ebony shadow (Free verse) by Twiggy77 My shadow seems darker than ever before
A face-less mime-artist, in ebony clothes
Eternally sentanced to mimic it's host
Enslaved throughout life to return as my ghost
If darkness could speak, my shadow would scream
As it repeats the demeanour of pathetic routines
My mirrored accomplice impossibly seems
To live at my side, but haunt me in dreams
The lessons of life have taught us to hate
We've kept pace with pain, but love's running late
Escaping the world with the drugs that we take
My shadow of morals questions my fate
Up the ladder:
Jack
Down the ladder:
Vulture
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Posted: November 10, 2004 6:37 AM PST; Last modified: November 10, 2004 6:37 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.029801 Overall Rank: 7358 Comments:
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Twiggy77 @ 217.137.233.90
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10-Nov-04/6:38 AM
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Guess who was depressed for a while.
sentenced, but other than that, twas good, especially the last stanza, only we allow the lessons of life to teach us to hate, as I'm a firm believer that hate is learned behavior.....
In under 50 words give me one example to prove your arguement that hate is "learned behaviour". Please also explain who the first teacher of hate was. Then flush yourself down the nearest toilet.
too easy, when you are born, you know nothing, therefore it's learned....I see you have also learned good people skills, your parents must truly be proud
when you are born, you know nothing. Therefore farting is learned behaviour.
sorry, I meant ~~~-=Learnede_Behavioure=-~~~
You are colossal dunce, at school you probably thought you were smart but were actually massively bullied for being such an outspoken bellend. You also probaly called your parents (if you knew them) by their first names. I knew when I came from the womb how to cry implying I knew how to be upset/demand my mothers massive drooping breast be pressed to my mouth. I also know that having been born as a Christian that the Lord had imbued me with hatred of all Islams and Sikhs. You live in some ghastly double world where there aren't such things as predetermination or souls. In other words you are a soggy dollop of failure on the chin of a gigantic quendo.
actually as a child in school, I said very little, and yeah I did wear the dunce cap a few times, and kicked little snotty ass boys like you up and down the football field for an outlet, then found out that writing was better. As for your hatred towards the islamic faith, how christian of you, my next door neighbor is a muslim and probably the nicest family I've ever met, happy hating
LOL.
The shadow of THIS mortal CONSTANTLY questions my fate, But it's all about morals anyway! Right?
A few miscpewings. elliminate the dash between mime artist. Other than that???
O.K. NOW I see that yer a Brit, Haven't voted, or commented on anything. read read read. comment, visit, learn. Welcome.
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