on Love Poem in HTML by Plaidypus
14 Feb 2005, 7:40 PM
I'm sorry, but this is just irritating to try to read. I can appreciate you're trying to be original here, but this sort of thing just makes it bad. Just stick to the basics and write the poem.
on Pillow Talk by horus8
14 Feb 2005, 7:41 PM
Yours are always interesting. I'll give you that.
on a study in blossoms and beauty by oneglove
14 Feb 2005, 7:44 PM
Way overwritten. You could say this in half the words and make it much better. It is overly..um...mushy, but theres some to salvage here. Just cut it in half.
on some deleted poem
14 Feb 2005, 7:46 PM
1) They're never as good as you think they will be.
2) You already know that.
3) Usually I cringe every time I read one of yours knowing that it's going to be the same old thing. For some reason, I actually kind of like this one. Don't ask me why, but I do.
2) You already know that.
3) Usually I cringe every time I read one of yours knowing that it's going to be the same old thing. For some reason, I actually kind of like this one. Don't ask me why, but I do.
on some deleted poem
14 Feb 2005, 7:48 PM
Ok, I can dig this. I seem to remember on one of mine not so long ago, you saying that you're the person you always wanted to be...maybe not the exact words. Anyway, simply put and not bad.
on some deleted poem
14 Feb 2005, 7:50 PM
Well, you use good imagery, even if it doesnt always make perfect sense.
on Piercings by PsydewaysTears
14 Feb 2005, 7:51 PM
Too much obviously forced rhyme.
on The Man I Love by Dovina
14 Feb 2005, 7:53 PM
That's good, because most likely, that's exactly who he's going to be. ;0)
on Children in the Storm by thepinkbunnyofdoom
14 Feb 2005, 7:55 PM
some spelling and punctuation errors, but overall, pretty good. Worth an edit.
on Christmas Break by Plaidypus
15 Feb 2005, 2:16 PM
See, ok, you wrote poetry here, and it's pretty good.
on Garage sale by INTRANSIT
17 Feb 2005, 5:33 PM
Pretty good. Glad to have you back.
on some deleted poem
17 Feb 2005, 5:40 PM
Definitely one of your best in a while.
on Lets recreate hell real properly by Crakyamuni
17 Feb 2005, 5:47 PM
I like the last three lines and the part about the ghost. the part in the middle you might could work on though.
on some deleted poem
17 Feb 2005, 7:38 PM
Ok, I laughed my ass off at this.
on Summing Up by Dovina
18 Feb 2005, 1:05 PM
One of your best in a while, D. Kind of a sad, haunting feel to it.
Wow, a 0...Don't think I've ever seen you give one of those before...Either I made you really mad or I posted the worst collection of scribblings ever.
Wow, a 0...Don't think I've ever seen you give one of those before...Either I made you really mad or I posted the worst collection of scribblings ever.
on A Violent Autumn by bamf909
20 Feb 2005, 1:04 PM
Ok, yeah, I like this. Much better than the Pirate thing.
on some deleted poem
25 Feb 2005, 8:10 PM
Super, Ed. Glad to see you back.
on some deleted poem
25 Feb 2005, 8:14 PM
Another great one.
on Into the Wreckage by zodiac
25 Feb 2005, 8:17 PM
Wow, I just read three good poems in a row. I don't know what to do....
on It’s the Management by Dovina
25 Feb 2005, 8:24 PM
We had an earthquake here a week or so ago. People just sat there with stupid looks on their faces until it was over. I'm telling you, if the big one ever does hit the New Madrid Fault, there's going to be a lot of dead fuckers around here.