| Re: Love Poem in HTML by Plaidypus |
14-Feb-05/7:40 PM |
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I'm sorry, but this is just irritating to try to read. I can appreciate you're trying to be original here, but this sort of thing just makes it bad. Just stick to the basics and write the poem.
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| Re: Pillow Talk by horus8 |
14-Feb-05/7:41 PM |
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Yours are always interesting. I'll give you that.
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| Re: a study in blossoms and beauty by oneglove |
14-Feb-05/7:44 PM |
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Way overwritten. You could say this in half the words and make it much better. It is overly..um...mushy, but theres some to salvage here. Just cut it in half.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
14-Feb-05/7:46 PM |
1) They're never as good as you think they will be.
2) You already know that.
3) Usually I cringe every time I read one of yours knowing that it's going to be the same old thing. For some reason, I actually kind of like this one. Don't ask me why, but I do.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
14-Feb-05/7:48 PM |
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Ok, I can dig this. I seem to remember on one of mine not so long ago, you saying that you're the person you always wanted to be...maybe not the exact words. Anyway, simply put and not bad.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
14-Feb-05/7:50 PM |
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Well, you use good imagery, even if it doesnt always make perfect sense.
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| Re: Piercings by PsydewaysTears |
14-Feb-05/7:51 PM |
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Too much obviously forced rhyme.
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| Re: The Man I Love by Dovina |
14-Feb-05/7:53 PM |
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That's good, because most likely, that's exactly who he's going to be. ;0)
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| Re: Children in the Storm by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
14-Feb-05/7:55 PM |
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some spelling and punctuation errors, but overall, pretty good. Worth an edit.
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| Re: Christmas Break by Plaidypus |
15-Feb-05/2:16 PM |
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See, ok, you wrote poetry here, and it's pretty good.
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| Re: Garage sale by INTRANSIT |
17-Feb-05/5:33 PM |
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Pretty good. Glad to have you back.
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17-Feb-05/5:40 PM |
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Definitely one of your best in a while.
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| Re: Lets recreate hell real properly by Crakyamuni |
17-Feb-05/5:47 PM |
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I like the last three lines and the part about the ghost. the part in the middle you might could work on though.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
17-Feb-05/7:38 PM |
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Ok, I laughed my ass off at this.
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| Re: Summing Up by Dovina |
18-Feb-05/1:05 PM |
One of your best in a while, D. Kind of a sad, haunting feel to it.
Wow, a 0...Don't think I've ever seen you give one of those before...Either I made you really mad or I posted the worst collection of scribblings ever.
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| Re: A Violent Autumn by bamf909 |
20-Feb-05/1:04 PM |
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Ok, yeah, I like this. Much better than the Pirate thing.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
25-Feb-05/8:10 PM |
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Super, Ed. Glad to see you back.
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25-Feb-05/8:14 PM |
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| Re: Into the Wreckage by zodiac |
25-Feb-05/8:17 PM |
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Wow, I just read three good poems in a row. I don't know what to do....
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| Re: Itâs the Management by Dovina |
25-Feb-05/8:24 PM |
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We had an earthquake here a week or so ago. People just sat there with stupid looks on their faces until it was over. I'm telling you, if the big one ever does hit the New Madrid Fault, there's going to be a lot of dead fuckers around here.
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