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Into the Wreckage (Free verse) by zodiac
Here was a party of aged men, Their glasses raised at the moment now Forever spun sunwhite and translucent. They used to toast: When I die, Love, hang me by The tweeds in the bedroom closet. And bring me out on holidays, Sit me down the table a ways, A little more tattered each time But serviceable yet. Until some year you come and find Me grown moth-light and firmament, And I will be content. On my way in I passed ten million men And women crying, My brother! Oh God, my brother! The crew holding the line stood stunned; Brothers themselves, they hadn't known There were so many brothers in this town. Here was a coffeemate, an insole, a purse. We told ourselves it could have been worse, Though we'd forgotten how. Oh, when I die Make me many things, but first A shady place where children play Under a spreading tree whose boughs Spill white petals across the way, Where lovers walk, long after this day Is set, and my dust dispersed.

Up the ladder: Quintus: Lesson 1

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Arithmetic Mean: 9.625
Weighted score: 6.243854
Overall Rank: 931
Posted: February 22, 2005 6:11 AM PST; Last modified: February 22, 2005 6:19 AM PST
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[10] Dreammaker1024 @ 198.146.102.83 | 23-Feb-05/5:28 PM | Reply
I enjoyed it, More than I you know. There are ways I would like to explain what I think of it to u, but I doubt they would do justice. So I'll leave it at this; beyond mere idea.
[n/a] Stephen Robins @ 213.146.148.199 > Dreammaker1024 | 24-Feb-05/8:44 AM | Reply
What?
[10] wilco @ 24.165.207.93 | 25-Feb-05/8:17 PM | Reply
Wow, I just read three good poems in a row. I don't know what to do....
[9] Bhaskaryya @ 202.63.190.228 | 25-Feb-05/10:18 PM | Reply
Beautiful work! I'd have loved to see this with the odd rhymes struck out but it was great nonetheless.

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