Re: Untitled by midnight	15-Aug-02/2:38 PM
Didn't I already say I didn't like this once. Do I have to vote on the poem for it to stop popping up in the random file? I know there are tons of poems on this site.
Re: Louisiana Lovers by wdallan	15-Aug-02/2:39 PM
Wow, this could have been good.
Re: love song by <~>	15-Aug-02/2:51 PM
Look at the shape Dark Master. It has a top, middle and fate bottom. Three levels, like a mega shopping mall. It even has a butt. And maybe that is Jack's secret to lulling in the 20-something girls at his age. On the other hand, maybe it is his perky love poems. Maybe he writes them all in heart shapes.
regarding some deleted poem...	15-Aug-02/2:54 PM
Now this poem only works on 2 1/2 levels. And you were not as pretty at the top. It looks more like a heavy metal guitar. See there is a skill. Practice, practice.
Re: Untitled by midnight	15-Aug-02/2:56 PM
I see you again dear poem, and still I cannot succumb to even pretending to feel the happiness everyone wants in being able to write anything more than rubbish. There, I voted, now please go away.
Re: A Geisha's Burlesque~Aforethought! by Bachus	15-Aug-02/7:35 PM
If you spent as much energy writing as you do whining you might actually write something worth reading on the site. You must get over being intimidated. It is the only way you can move on from mother. And by the way, razor girl, drivel is an archaic noun, but I do believe it is also a good old verb.
Re: A Geisha's Burlesque~Aforethought! by Bachus	15-Aug-02/7:51 PM
I was talking to Bachus. Your poems are hilarious, especially that dwarf one. We need someone here to mock the form we try so hard to take seriously and over intellectualize. The teeny bobbers don't get it because their hormones are flying everywhere. If you are a teenager, I apologize. This guy, bachus, seems to take everything personally and seriously and try to cover up the fact he does not by posting this crap, which really wastes everyone's time. So if he put the whining to writing he just might have something. Sorry to talk about you the 3rd here Bachus.
regarding some deleted poem...	15-Aug-02/7:58 PM
You should take tips. You're a measly 15 year old. How do you think you can get better without listening to people who can actually write? Where are you people learning this shit? When did a simple line break become a use for the ellipsoidal? A line break is a natural pause in poetry. Simple as that. At this rate, it is going to take two hours to finish reading this.
regarding some deleted poem...	15-Aug-02/8:46 PM
Who said anything about hours8. This is Bachus' stunning work.
Re: Love by skaterdude396	16-Aug-02/7:59 AM
A skater dude and skater gurl writing are such sweet little poems to each other. And to think you hide behind the armor of face piercings and green hair. It's Emo poetry.
Re: odd star by pitchblackdisaster	16-Aug-02/8:00 AM
Send this off to Disney.
Re: Nicotine Ruse by Red_is_life	16-Aug-02/8:01 AM
Another dead poet. This sucks dead poet.
Re: Sonnet Conceived While Standing by Blake	16-Aug-02/8:09 AM
A traditionalist poet, and at sixteen: how fucking cute! It is great you read the old dead farts, as they are most important. But these paltry imitations should be left to ones diary.
Re: solace by crin	16-Aug-02/8:13 AM
If you would have actually used images to convey this, you might have something resembling a poem. Unfortunately, you did do that. You told us everything and did not show us a thing.
Re: I Am by necroscope7	16-Aug-02/8:15 AM
Not a good poem. Tells all, shows nothing.
Re: Insight by necroscope7	16-Aug-02/8:17 AM
This is worse than the last one I read of yours. Have you considered a journal?
Re: Unfinished by Blake	16-Aug-02/8:35 AM
Whilst? Why are you using this language? Do you know no other?
Re: Unfinished by Blake	16-Aug-02/10:03 AM
You can prefer the language all you want. You can write darling tributes to the ways of old. Many skilled writers have utilized the language or elements of it while expressing modern themes (e.g. Tom Stoppard). But you don't to that. You took a high school English lit class and were mesmerized like many of us when we were in puberty. But unfortunately you are stuck with who you are and the Romantic Age is long gone and your cheap imitations of these dead farts are just that: cheap.
Re: Purgatory of Consciousness by crims0ngh0st	16-Aug-02/10:10 AM
tightly wound darkness - nice rest of poem - not nice.
Re: A Geisha's Burlesque~Aforethought! by Bachus	16-Aug-02/10:17 AM
There you go my intimidated whiner. Put a real poem up and quit wasting our time with your babbling nonsense. You express your opinions all over the place and only post this along with the other crap that I am not sure if you are trying to get a rise out of people or you have just been living with your mother in the basement way to long. I speak, I infuriate, but I also write poetry. You should try the same.