Unfinished

Member since 2002 · Posted 10 Jul 2002 · 5 comments

If only I might view passion rejoined Or merest sign, to lift me from abyss But peace I only find in verses coined Whilst poetic desire suffices for a kiss; Still, let this serve not to shackle you to me I intend to rise through lyric, joyously For, as such work, my sorrow cannot remain When the very caress of a hand frees the chain.

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[0] poetandknowit 16-Aug-02/8:35 AM Reply

Whilst? Why are you using this language? Do you know no other?

[2] Bachus 16-Aug-02/8:58 AM Reply

You were more relevant alive. Or were you? Nay. Nay. I scraped your poem onto the curb, but still I reek in such a way like mother's broiled cunt filet.

[n/a] Blake 16-Aug-02/9:03 AM Reply

I simply prefer the language...I have yet to find a modern poet who I connect with as well as "old dead farts".

[0] poetandknowit 16-Aug-02/10:03 AM Reply

You can prefer the language all you want. You can write darling tributes to the ways of old. Many skilled writers have utilized the language or elements of it while expressing modern themes (e.g. Tom Stoppard). But you don't to that. You took a high school English lit class and were mesmerized like many of us when we were in puberty. But unfortunately you are stuck with who you are and the Romantic Age is long gone and your cheap imitations of these dead farts are just that: cheap.

[9] pitchblackdisaster 16-Aug-02/11:51 AM Reply

shear brilliance.
this poem really grabbed my heart and i suppose you are a romantic man and im sure it is not just old farts that like your work i am probbably one of the youngest people on poemranker and i like your work alot and im sure it means allot to you and doesnt desserve to be dissed as it has been from what i have read.