regarding some deleted poem...	14-Jan-03/10:30 PM
Wow. Just, wow.
Re: The Golden Rule by Quarton	14-Jan-03/10:39 PM
The first sentence reminded me of this horrid children's book my daughter loves. "Cautiously, the zebra wanders across the plain Playfully, the giraffes dance and play in the water Determinedly, the cheetah seeks his prey." AAAHHHHH Not to say this poem is horrid, it is just all about god this and not god that and after awhile the spiritual quest or the finding of comfort in the lack of spiritual quest is tiresome. Of course, every writer goes through it at some point. It was just the starting sentence, the adverbial clause, reminding me of that horrid book where the clauses fill each page, and the pictures cannot ease the pain of hearing my voice read those sentences. The horror. Sorry. Carry on.
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Jan-03/10:53 PM
Auster and Levertov, in my opinion, are his best translators. Of course, you can read him native. Quite interesting. Was this a quicke, or written over the study break?
Re: Anchored pockets by INTRANSIT	14-Jan-03/11:18 PM
Another adverbial clause. They are everywhere. You know, Intransit, I am proud of you. You are up to 13 poems now and have yet to pull them all off.
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Jan-03/11:30 PM
Who is the woodsman? Are you saying I have no morals?
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Jan-03/11:31 AM
Is that a new title? The first line makes me think of John Lennon singing "So this is Christmas".. La de da.
Re: <{Grasping^Grendals}> by Bachus	16-Jan-03/11:35 AM
Have you read "Grendal" by John Gardner?
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Jan-03/12:18 PM
"To" should be "too" in two cases! What did they teach you in primary over there?
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Jan-03/1:27 PM
Fix the spacing. Then I will read it.
Re: All you can eat by flatliner	16-Jan-03/1:51 PM
You also have a poem called "overweight." Are you fat? I weigh 316 pounds and have to buy two seats when I fly American Airlines. Anyway, I like the title and was excited to read the poem, but was a bit disappointed how you used the extended metaphor. So much for bringing expectations to something.
Re: Drunk Satan by smlink84	16-Jan-03/9:49 PM
Pointless gibberish.
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Jan-03/9:55 PM
I like the title, but little else. Taro buns are the best!!!
Re: No future by Freethinker1602	16-Jan-03/9:58 PM
Pimple poem, super sized!
Re: Perversions 3: Payback by razorgrin	16-Jan-03/10:04 PM
Are you talking about Ed Gein? anyway... You need serious help this poem isn't worth the time and effort you spent to think up.... an moral impression of wasted space
Re: Ouch by heroditus	16-Jan-03/10:27 PM
Is this a haiku or a proverb? Either way it would hurt.
Re: Trespasser at the Men's Bathing Pond by Christof	16-Jan-03/10:30 PM
Maybe it is because I have never had the pleasure of going to a men's bathing pond, but that first image confuses me to no end. Can you explain it?
Re: Life As a Boat by dougsoderstrom	16-Jan-03/10:30 PM
Bummer.
Re: Turmoil by ThoughtfulSoul	16-Jan-03/10:31 PM
Nice sentiment. Bad poem.
Re: The Poop Machines by dougsoderstrom	16-Jan-03/10:43 PM
Duh. So we need a college educated man to spell it out for the masses? Is that it? Please, what was your purpose in writing this.
regarding some deleted poem...	21-Jan-03/5:37 PM
Can you please tell me why you deleted my comment? It was both pertinent and insightful. Also, I was simply asking why you made the stylistic choice to cut off the gerund? Was it to achieve a reduction in language? I would appreciate in the future not to be cut off and deleted without an answer. If you go around placing harsh criticism in other writer's comment boxes, yet, delete yours, does that not make you a hypocrite? Again, welcome back to poemranker. I am glad to see you are a woman of principle.