Re: a comment on in you by fevriere	9-Feb-04/6:02 AM
Eh?
Re: a comment on How to sleep sitting up by Bachus	9-Feb-04/3:53 AM
I suppose it means the K on kling, but it's exactly fine. Reminds me of poor out-of-town supermarkets.
Re: Nina Simone (part one) by zodiac	8-Feb-04/8:51 AM
I liked the second verse.
Re: a comment on Love that's not true or double-sided by fevriere	8-Feb-04/8:45 AM
Ah, delicious. Thank-you very much. :)
Re: a comment on The Upside-Down Frown by fevriere	28-Jan-04/6:40 AM
That's great crit. Thank-you. I feel like reduxing now. :)
Re: a comment on The Upside-Down Frown by fevriere	25-Jan-04/1:56 PM
Is that bad? *meek girlish glances hitherto*
Re: a comment on Games by fevriere	24-Jan-04/2:03 AM
Thank-you. I am disappointed. But I am beginning to see how tangled it is.
Re: Perfect by mytenderrage	18-Jan-04/8:52 AM
It's lacking, poetically. It tells rather than showing. I like that you know what you're saying but at the same time I'd rather the words illustrated instead of just plonking down their meaning.
Re: a comment on Liberty! by fevriere	18-Jan-04/8:43 AM
Is it just freeverse? I didn't understand the catergory of "concrete" - maybe I should read a few more. I appreciate the encouragement, very much so, but as Horus did point out, sometimes it's more complimentary to offer constructive critcisms. I need both.
Re: a comment on Dry Beast Night by fevriere	16-Jan-04/1:06 PM
Glad you feel inspired. Will change strick to stricken and mistiful to.. Mistful. I think.
Re: a comment on Dry Beast Night by fevriere	16-Jan-04/1:04 PM
Salt mositure, I believe, needs reconsidering: but growl for sleep, I like. Doesn't it sound like a hungry belly? Thanks. :)
Re: a comment on Dry Beast Night by fevriere	16-Jan-04/12:54 PM
It was a given work. I like that you can kind-of feel it, and it's a bit wearing. But thank-you.
Re: a comment on The Blues by fevriere	13-Jan-04/9:09 AM
Thanks for that. :)
Re: a comment on The Blues by fevriere	13-Jan-04/9:08 AM
Sssnnnwhuffffll? Hnwhuffl hhnnwfl hnfl hfl? Gdroblboblhobngbl gbl gl g g g g glbgl. Drublhaflablhaflubhafgabhaflhafl fl fl - gm grawwwww grf grawf awfgm graw gm. Hovoplodok - doplodovok - plovodokot - doplodokosh? Splgraw fok fok splgrafhatchgabrlgabrl fok splfok! Zgra kra gka fok! Grof grawff gahf? Gombl mbl bl - blm plm, blm plm, blm plm, blp The Loch Ness Monster's Song, by Edwin Morgan. My point was, that poetry is wordplay, it's original use of traditional terms. It's giving words meaning.
Re: a comment on Migrating Storks by Blue Magpie	12-Jan-04/2:18 PM
Shame on you! Theirs has no apostrophe, as far as I'm concerned.
Re: Migrating Storks by Blue Magpie	12-Jan-04/2:13 PM
Simplistic but telling. I feel the part about the storks is slightly lacking, not really inforamtive. Perhaps relish whatever metaphor strikes you. Or perhaps keep it this way.
Re: van Gogh's Irises by lastobelus	12-Jan-04/2:09 PM
Painfulyl evocative. Plus it sounds like it's published.
Re: Sympathetic Guilt by middenHeap	12-Jan-04/2:06 PM
Intelligent. No con crit. Sorry.
Re: a comment on The Blues by fevriere	12-Jan-04/2:01 PM
Poetry is by nature non-sensical. I was referring to the personal feeling of depression, and literally, music expressing depressive feelings, and its tendency to linger. The use of "hang" was a morbid touch. Sorry. Again, the image of kissing hands is a non-literal poetic one that I thought sounded confused & lovely. But I suppose I am not writing for myself anymore. I must confess, I wrote it as a writing exercise with a list of required words. I should have re-read and edited but I didn't. I agree that the "criminals" idea looks, frankly, silly. Thank-you.
Re: a comment on The Blues by fevriere	12-Jan-04/1:54 PM
She emant quiver. When the truth literally resonates and your perception or play of it swings closer and further away from it though the truth in itself remains untouched.