Liberty!

Member since 2004 · Posted 16 Jan 2004 · Edited 25 Dec 2004 · 5 comments

I bit the wedge, I drank the blood I licked juice, I smelt oranges I swam the winter sky, and suddenly LIBERTY! I flicked the febrile fairy from my eyes I knocked Lolita down and didn't cry I snapped the book, and suddenly LIBERTY! The sun's an orange, life's a song My eyelashes are full and long Like love, I dance on, and all along LIBERTY! I broke the bottle, I freed the ship I cracked the varnish, & the manuscript I ripped I broke, and spoke, and suddenly LIBERTY! And my volcano lava love itself comes tumbling out like perfume on myself and colours the reporter who cries who sings LIBERTY!

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[10] Goad 17-Jan-04/10:34 AM Reply

This is an excellent exultation. Hoot'n'holler!

[9] horus8 17-Jan-04/12:15 PM Reply

Is it shaped like concrete?

[9] horus8 17-Jan-04/12:16 PM Reply

Or do you think that if you keep repeating the word Liberty it will turn into a concrete poem.

[10] Goad › horus8 17-Jan-04/2:09 PM Reply

It's miscategorized, but it's in any case worlds better than most of the shit we have to wade through, so maybe some encouragement is in order?

[n/a] fevriere › Goad 18-Jan-04/8:43 AM Reply

Is it just freeverse? I didn't understand the catergory of "concrete" - maybe I should read a few more.
I appreciate the encouragement, very much so, but as Horus did point out, sometimes it's more complimentary to offer constructive critcisms. I need both.