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Liberty! (Free verse) by fevriere

I bit the wedge, I drank the blood I licked juice, I smelt oranges I swam the winter sky, and suddenly LIBERTY! I flicked the febrile fairy from my eyes I knocked Lolita down and didn't cry I snapped the book, and suddenly LIBERTY! The sun's an orange, life's a song My eyelashes are full and long Like love, I dance on, and all along LIBERTY! I broke the bottle, I freed the ship I cracked the varnish, & the manuscript I ripped I broke, and spoke, and suddenly LIBERTY! And my volcano lava love itself comes tumbling out like perfume on myself and colours the reporter who cries who sings LIBERTY!

fevriere 18-Jan-04/8:43 AM
Is it just freeverse? I didn't understand the catergory of "concrete" - maybe I should read a few more.
I appreciate the encouragement, very much so, but as Horus did point out, sometimes it's more complimentary to offer constructive critcisms. I need both.




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