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Love that's not true or double-sided (Free verse) by fevriere
Kinky crime that tricks and treats and never tries too hard runs underground electric, inspires dandelions in my wrists and eyes this paper phase, breeze-waltzing on my grave, fever-pleased and mortally diseased flies, and slowly leaves.

Up the ladder: The Narrow Way
Down the ladder: strawberries

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 5.2384057
Overall Rank: 4131
Posted: February 8, 2004 7:26 AM PST; Last modified: February 8, 2004 7:26 AM PST
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[10] zodiac @ 67.240.155.70 | 8-Feb-04/8:44 AM | Reply
There should be punctuation after hard (a comma, probably) and eyes (a dash, comma, or semicolon). You might change the comma after flies to a dash. Great.
[n/a] fevriere @ 62.254.128.6 > zodiac | 8-Feb-04/8:45 AM | Reply
Ah, delicious. Thank-you very much. :)
[10] wFraser Allonby Q.C.w @ 195.157.153.253 | 9-Feb-04/6:38 AM | Reply
Billy Bunturd.

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