Re: Lover by daveslady	10-May-04/3:58 AM
If you were forced - let's say at gunpoint, or else by some crazed chef wielding a large rancid hamhock - anyway, I'm getting off topic: What I mean is, if you were forced by a hamhock-wielding maniac to identify yourself some other way than by your connection to Dave, could you? You should probably think about this question a lot more than you're going to.
Re: Serendipity by cuddlytiger17	10-May-04/4:07 AM
I disagree with hypatia. I find the rhymes here sublime, though pity/serendipity did feel rather like throwing myself at a full run into the back of a parked Dodge Dart.
Re: This Summers Ablaze by DeadtotheWorld	10-May-04/4:08 AM
"on a summers ablaze" doesn't make any sense. And this is not a villanelle. -No vote-
regarding some deleted poem...	10-May-04/10:55 AM
That's your leaving rant?! What a crock!
Re: ...So We Stayed In The Water by Fear of Garbage	12-May-04/6:13 AM
The best part is the spiders that cover you like insects.
regarding some deleted poem...	12-May-04/6:14 AM
Bad semicolon use, bud. And didn't it used to say, "the pales we made" or something such? I liked that better.
Re: Me and My sense by Prince of Void	12-May-04/6:16 AM
You have absolutely no idea what you're talking about, do you?
regarding some deleted poem...	12-May-04/8:31 AM
I love these poemranker-inspired posts. Unfortunately, I have no idea whose the radioactive tears are, nor why they'd be mourning spring while celebrating winter. Maybe it's an allusion to 'crocodile tears'? But no, that doesn't make sense either. And a dozen other things.
Re: inverse square by ex0teric	13-May-04/5:19 AM
For dozens of reasons, I don't think the inverse square law is really the one you want to use here.
Re: Prophets by unknown^user	13-May-04/5:21 AM
Nope^infinity.
Re: Bleeding in the American South by wilco	13-May-04/5:25 AM
How do you "satisfy a fact"?
Re: FINGER PIE by titan69	13-May-04/5:32 AM
Why does the poem have a line through it?
Re: FINGER PIE by titan69	13-May-04/5:33 AM
Congratulations on posting the worst title on this site since SupremeDreamer's "Ravings of a Dreamer"!
Re: The Blood-Stained Body by Phalkon	13-May-04/8:59 AM
"Could it be, as Rush Limbaugh mentioned in passing on a recent broadcast, that the perpetrators of the alleged crime are homosexuals? If that's the case, maybe the motivation for their activities was far different than from what has been discussed in the media's wall to wall coverage of this incident. If these individuals are homosexuals, maybe they were getting stimulated by looking at naked Iraqis in sexually provocative positions. Of course, as Limbaugh said because of the military's "don't ask, don't tell" policy concerning homosexuality we'll probably never know the answer, but I think the scenario is still definitely worth considering. After all, it would answer why the alleged activities took place and it would also provide a solution to the really bizarre question as to why pictures were taken of the humiliating and sexually suggestive poses. Why, you ask? Many people believe that homosexuals have a much greater potential than heterosexuals to be sexual predators. In addition, a sizeable number of sexually dysfunctional individuals (aka sexual predators) take pictures of their illicit acts. It gives them an opportunity to glory in their "conquest" as they visually relive their sickening activities. But here's an interesting scenario to ponder that Limbaugh also mentioned. If this was ever found out to be the case, what would those liberal defenders of homosexual marriage and "gay" rights do? Would liberal Democrats have to adopt an different attitude to this situation and quit their incessant criticism of the Bush Administration and the liberation of Iraq? It's definitely something worth thinking about. After all, if the individuals involved in these alleged crimes were homosexual, or there was a homosexual element involved, who can blame them. They would just be acting out their natural biological inclinations, right? And (so the theory goes) who could fault them for that because their actions would have been a result of the way they were born, not in any way the volitional actions of a lifestyle choice."
Re: She Dreams of Yesterday by Phalkon	13-May-04/11:07 AM
"the days go on without her...and she dreams of yesterday" makes no sense. "she's never had true love she's never had a life she's never had a family she never had money but she never had greed and she dreams of yesterday" makes no sense. "every day is dark and gloomy...and she dreams of yesterday" makes no sense. "she believes in God and an afterlife but she dreams of yesterday" makes no sense.
Re: death makes me vain! by SweetJuliet10	14-May-04/4:28 AM
Hey, wow! I can tell your contribution to poemranker is going to be valuable and interesting! Except for the fact that you're going to leave in a week without even bothering to change your username to 'Deleted User' when you find your poems can't receive any 'constructive criticism' here.
Re: untitled: dedicated to my soldier/husband by SweetJuliet10	14-May-04/4:39 AM
I read "my soldier/husband" as "my soldier and/or my husband". Am I to understand that you have your own soldier in addition to having a husband? How does that work, exactly? Is he an "Army of One"? I suppose you might have meant "my soldier divided by my husband," but if you divide a soldier by a husband, what is the result? A bit of body armor, testosterone, and barely-concealed homoerotic tendencies over 1, I imagine.
Re: The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w	14-May-04/5:19 AM
Ace!
Re: Fear by Phalkon	14-May-04/6:16 AM
What do you mean by "my fears begin to forte"? The most logical explanation I can come up with is that you're using some kind of obsolete olden verb meaning "to builde a [sofa cushion] fortresse." Is this the case?
regarding some deleted poem...	14-May-04/6:25 AM
1) Where are you getting this stuff about Aboriginals dropping hints into abysses? 2) Why does everyone on this site insist on ending a metaphor with "but this is not [whatever the metaphor was]"? 3) I knew a guy who passed a pink coil once after drinking a hideous concoction of olive oil, grapefruit juice, and wormroot. Living in this part of the south you see that kind of thing pretty often. 4) Gravity doesn't do anyone's dirty work. Women work against gravity, which is defined as the inverse relationship between age and the distance separating a womans breasts from her knees. 5) Congratulations on not using an adjective noun title.