| Re: a comment on Triangle of the Courtyard Square by OneFingerAnswer |
23-Sep-02/11:23 PM |
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What does that have to do with my original comment? The pronouns way this thing down like an anchor.
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| Re: a comment on Triangle of the Courtyard Square by OneFingerAnswer |
23-Sep-02/11:19 PM |
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Active? Like it's ticking, or it's exercising?
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| Re: happy hour by Limness |
23-Sep-02/11:16 PM |
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Fuckin' a. As the dudes would say. You got this case won. Open and shut.
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| Re: Triangle of the Courtyard Square by OneFingerAnswer |
23-Sep-02/11:07 PM |
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All those he shes he she she he hehhehehehshehshehheheheehshhshshsehesshehshehshehe's have me bored and uninterested.
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| Re: Unveiled by aperfecttool77 |
23-Sep-02/11:02 PM |
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Why is it so hard for peopppple to express themselves in simile? This is too concrete. Inner conversations do not poetry make.
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| Re: Married by INTRANSIT |
23-Sep-02/5:46 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Spanish fLie by flatliner |
23-Sep-02/5:35 PM |
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Es la mera verdad! Tu espanol es horible!
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| Re: Spanish fLie by flatliner |
23-Sep-02/4:46 PM |
No entiendo. Todo esta demasiado confuso. El primer verso si se entiende, pero comensando con {si
ay tiempo me olvideras} no sera {si uviera tiempo me olvideras}? During the day we search for a way
to live/If we meet, it is by mistake/ Everything that happened, we shall forget, and,/I know it is not the
truth. (I don't understand what you're talking about).
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| Re: Here In The Heart of Amber by Lenore |
23-Sep-02/7:06 AM |
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This is fantastic. Particularly the last stanza, it is complete in thought, rhythm and rhyme.
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| Re: Trespasser at the Men's Bathing Pond by Christof |
23-Sep-02/6:58 AM |
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I voted on this but hadn't commented. The title is a stranger to me. I assume the stone-dropper is in S1 is the premoter of your desire in S2 but I keep picturing a man so it puts me off. I prefer S2. Line 4 seems unnecessary I read it without L4 and (spreads) in L3, but that just means I transformed it into something more mine. I particularly like the last line. You have to be brave to rouse another's desire. I haven't seen too much expressing that.
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| Re: Spellbound by Limness |
22-Sep-02/5:11 PM |
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It's good from middle on (sans cats). Last stanza best of them.
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| Re: O Man Away From Me by Limness |
22-Sep-02/4:57 PM |
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I love the heavy blankets line, have you thought of leaving it there? the next line subtracts from it.
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| Re: a comment on Tugboats by poetandknowit |
20-Sep-02/2:00 PM |
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What on earth are you talking about? Has my tone hasn't changed. I sport no emblems. I believe you are starving for attention. Go outside and play.
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| Re: a comment on Tugboats by poetandknowit |
20-Sep-02/1:50 PM |
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Take a look at what you just wrote. You simply repeat what is said to you and then accent your stupidty with bad sentence structure and mis- use of the word "to". You have the sophistication of a 10 yr. old.
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| Re: a comment on Tugboats by poetandknowit |
20-Sep-02/1:41 PM |
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You're so predictable. I don't have to look things up, well sometimes to make sure I'm not mis-spelling them. The words I used are far from big. Trinity Juvenile Fatuity. Are you home schooled? Does your fundamentalist mommy waiver between punishing you to keep you out of the eternal pit and licking your genitals? Hard to get an adequate education under those conditions.
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| Re: a comment on Tugboats by poetandknowit |
20-Sep-02/1:32 PM |
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You're such an ass, nentwined was reply to someone else. You are clearly clueless. The 3rd incarnation of juvenile expression. The Trinity of Fatuity is now complete. I await your miserable attempt at rebuttal.
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| Re: a comment on Tugboats by poetandknowit |
20-Sep-02/10:54 AM |
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My God even your comments are well worn cliches. Can you not claim authorship to anything you write?
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| Re: On waiting to pick up my lover on Friday by bigbigdog |
20-Sep-02/10:45 AM |
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| Re: Persephone by Lynn |
20-Sep-02/10:35 AM |
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Wow this really is gorgeous. Great images, told in voice of a young woman. The relationships between her and the other actors are fully developed. This is fine. Reminds me of Ann Sexton's Transformations. Have you read them?
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| Re: a comment on Fleas by bigbigdog |
20-Sep-02/10:23 AM |
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Joke: A remark, story or action intended to evoke laughter. Not to be confused with laughingstock: an object of ridicule, as in: You and your friend are totally unaware that you are becoming the laughingstocks of this site.
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