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O Man Away From Me (Free verse) by Limness
How did it start, the Cutting words apart, and Keeping to the pattern? You chose, to sew, Sew your words against the cold Inside. Why hide behind the knowing? Your heart shows through to those with Eyes to see through the embroidery. Finery dressed in Spartan spurts Is plain to me; all I needed was the numbers And I had you figured. You banged your keys in defense of the Spiritually counted babbler, who Someone else owned, and I saw you then Though the veil was dense, Though not so thick as the Wrath you'd vent And you piqued me. Obverse and reverse, Hasn't Caesar had his due? The contract's done; you Were the one. But, so was I Left behind To learn the craft of quilting. Heavy blankets make a warm bed.

Up the ladder: I pluck not the roses
Down the ladder: Reason for being late

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.142857
Weighted score: 5.03842
Overall Rank: 7185
Posted: September 20, 2002 4:25 PM PDT; Last modified: September 25, 2002 9:58 AM PDT
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[6] DreamMachine @ 66.212.78.246 | 20-Sep-02/4:46 PM | Reply
Time is dealt with on this side of the galaxy but I do recall an interest for some such as yourself that have a nac for weaving thier own webs or should I say blankets of time in your case?
[n/a] deleted user @ 67.40.59.25 | 20-Sep-02/6:30 PM | Reply
Point taken. Point taken.
[n/a] Limness @ 24.44.185.41 > deleted user | 20-Sep-02/6:53 PM | Reply
ah. babbit had too strong a beat to be beaten. i am glad to see you peek out now and again.
[n/a] god'swife @ 209.179.213.115 | 22-Sep-02/4:57 PM | Reply
I love the heavy blankets line, have you thought of leaving it there? the next line subtracts from it.
[n/a] Limness @ 167.206.181.179 > god'swife | 25-Sep-02/10:02 AM | Reply
you are correct. it's gone now. the point was taken. actually, the idea for the last bit drew out, in part, from lucinda williams' 'lonely girls' on her essence cd.
[n/a] Tibbs @ 67.84.171.10 | 25-Sep-02/10:50 PM | Reply
Indeed. But flesh makes a warmer one, as we both must know.
[9] Shardik @ 24.126.113.154 | 23-Jan-03/5:23 PM | Reply
Impressive knitting.
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