Married

by INTRANSIT

Member since 2002 · Posted 23 Sep 2002 · 18 comments

Do not build your spouse, for they came to you already assembled. Instead tether them, and fly them like a kite.

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[10] god'swife 23-Sep-02/5:46 PM Reply

I love your poem.

[n/a] INTRANSIT › god'swife 23-Sep-02/6:51 PM Reply

Yeah, I'm a sucker for simplicity, and romance. I guess we cant help who we are, right?

[4] RoseEyes 23-Sep-02/7:10 PM Reply

this sucks. I am a sucker for depth, meaning.... and love. Did i mention Love?

[4] RoseEyes 23-Sep-02/7:25 PM Reply

However, i will give you points for your creativity in ability to express what you are striving to say... similarities, not differences.

[n/a] INTRANSIT › RoseEyes 23-Sep-02/8:44 PM Reply

OUCH! I thought it had plenty of depth. Was I too vague maybe?
'Course I can't please every one. Thanks for the input:)

[7] <~> › INTRANSIT 23-Sep-02/9:09 PM Reply

i think the word 'tether' took it out of the realm of romance and deep love and into a more property-oriented schemata. which doesn't make sense with the kite-flying analogy. so, all in all, a thought-provoking poem.

[n/a] INTRANSIT › <~> 23-Sep-02/9:24 PM Reply

OK I think you hit the mark. Maybe I should have said "tether with love". Yes? No? Throw it out the dou?

[7] <~> › INTRANSIT 23-Sep-02/9:26 PM Reply

no tethering at all. let your lives be as two circles which gently touch.

[7] <~> › INTRANSIT 23-Sep-02/9:27 PM Reply

both fly free, and come together freely, bring something new each time.

[n/a] INTRANSIT › <~> 23-Sep-02/9:31 PM Reply

Good point.

[n/a] Frass › INTRANSIT 24-Sep-02/1:48 PM Reply

No, tethered...many, many tethers. Some invisible to others and seen only by two.

[n/a] cobalt › Frass 24-Sep-02/1:53 PM Reply

glad i'm not tethered to you

[9] searching 25-Sep-02/4:21 PM Reply

These are truly the words of emotion expressed in "flow" with serene acceptance. Good job.

[8] morffrom 26-Sep-02/5:47 AM Reply

Not sure about the tether either ( try saying that is sounds funny !), otherwise simply great-8

[8] Christof 27-Sep-02/6:33 AM Reply

Keep the tether - like it or not, it's part of the deal.

[10] god'swife 30-Sep-02/6:04 PM Reply

Tether is real. All else is idealism. Plus it brings the visual of holding on and and helping them, even if it means fighting the prevailing winds. Also it is love that keeps me tethered. Otherwise I'd have drifted out into the stratosphere years ago, or worse yet, gotten stuck in a tree. So you're leaving truck-driving? I hope it works out well for you.

[n/a] INTRANSIT › god'swife 1-Oct-02/5:52 AM Reply

Thanks, you really felt this the way I did! Exactly, in fact. Ido see what they mean with the tether thing, but I cant bring myself to morph it. I'm afraid it will lose its (panache)?

[9] Ranger 8-Feb-07/8:50 AM Reply

Superb