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Jackanapes and smoke buttons (Free verse) by Bachus
Why I spit? Well that's simple. Take a long fucking look At your logic, and method, And an obsessive compulsive need for security blankets. I watched you for days. Gossip to friends about Necessitous heartache. As I purged my bleeding Stomach and vomited in The Jacuzzi from the bad Catering sticking to my Fingers and throat. But you, you kept up the grand facade and orated to the deserving. About fast food and hand lotions, and your quick trips to Bermuda. Your trough fed Japanese gardener. I saw you then as you always were, But different, better, a blue bleeder. A fine diner, And the toast of Oxford. And then… Then a great day came when you let me kiss your pinky ring, and play with your Lionel train set in the basement. You let me blow your whistle, and push the smoke button. I was so fucking happy I cried. Now look at you. Look at me. Wrecked, On the bridge Between paper Mountains, and a pair of your sisters pomp pomes. Look at you. So fucking Cocksure. Making me. Make myself. Sick of us.

Up the ladder: Married

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.25
Weighted score: 6.6448817
Overall Rank: 561
Posted: October 29, 2002 9:19 PM PST; Last modified: June 11, 2003 1:59 PM PDT
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Comments:
[9] -=SeTTle=- @ 140.186.49.231 | 29-Oct-02/10:08 PM | Reply
You're clearly gay, what?
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 > -=SeTTle=- | 29-Oct-02/10:20 PM | Reply
someone told me you were writing for gore in tennesse, i didn't expect you around...pardon me while i feed the coi carp...would you like something to drink...perhaps...cigarettes and chocolate milk?
[10] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 30-Oct-02/7:05 AM | Reply
you were cleary not a good fit, jack. this is a painful read; you are getting closer. put down that kale gun, wouldja? the thing makes me nervous. here, have a canape, i mean, 10.
[10] god'swife @ 209.179.212.2 | 30-Oct-02/8:40 AM | Reply
Beautiful.
[10] daniella @ 200.45.50.235 | 30-Oct-02/2:33 PM | Reply
brilliantly lewd and gruesome. what wonders would become you if you could forge a smile.
[8] scitz @ 195.92.168.169 | 11-Jun-03/3:42 PM | Reply
I love these outbursts of yours there so fucking apt.8
[10] Robert K Foster @ 66.66.214.253 | 11-Jun-03/4:15 PM | Reply
Powerful and succinct. Nicely done. deserves a 10.
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