Re: Skin on My Soup by jessicazee	14-Jan-03/11:04 PM
The trick is not to let it come to a boil. Neither soup, nor jello, nor gravy. Heat it through, but do not scald. You must stand at attendance, with the flame at low-medium. Then when the steam begins to rise from the rim, take it off the heat and cover. Perfect, I never have served an unsightly dish.
Re: a comment on Good to the Last Drop by Bonehiss	14-Jan-03/4:19 PM
Cafe sans Lait. Morning without you. There is no sugar can unbitter this final cup.
Re: insomnia by Bill Z Bub	14-Jan-03/4:13 PM
Our bodies shall meet over such a dish.
Re: Good to the Last Drop by Bonehiss	14-Jan-03/4:03 PM
Hate the titled. Mrs. Folgers and all that. We share a word. Weren't you once some other name?
Re: a poet in the city by Bill Z Bub	13-Jan-03/8:46 AM
Above the waist she's pretty, but she's got too much junk in her trunk. I think the main thing is the editing. I've read some very good things but they're drowning in butter, and I can't appreaciate the subtlities. Perhaps it is just a matter of taste.
Re: not even soup by <~>	13-Jan-03/12:07 AM
How does the title imply a soup kitchen? Being soupless.
Re: a comment on not even soup by <~>	12-Jan-03/11:51 PM
I guess I've never been hungry enough to hallucinate vast chowder.
Re: not even soup by <~>	12-Jan-03/11:32 PM
The las two lines have individual potential, but together it's obscure beyond recognition.
Re: a comment on Ode to the inafamous dark angel by Lucifer	12-Jan-03/9:47 PM
Passionate. The last line is what I keep my senses open for; surrounded by pestulence. I weep tears of blood.
Re: Epistemology (2nd draft) by Ranger	3-Jan-03/7:42 AM
This is way too over the top. You turn me off from reading the rest pretty much immediately. "Escaping from this..." sounds like a sentence that escaped from a -=Dark_Angel=-'s lastest entry. This poem lacks a seriousness. 'phosphorescent sizzling metaphor'!? That's just ugly.
Re: a comment on unsent by Bill Z Bub	2-Jan-03/8:36 PM
Its always good to try, what's the worst that can happen?Get rid of 'maybe' and 'surely' from lines 1 & 2. For me that makes it more immediate? What do you think?
Re: unsent by Bill Z Bub	2-Jan-03/7:15 PM
This is gorgeous. Why did you place 'yours truly' at the end? Lines 10- 12 make my lowback start to tickle, and then I involuntary start arching my back. Good stuff.
Re: Equality by Freethinker1602	2-Jan-03/7:07 PM
Hahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha!!!!
Re: unsent by Bill Z Bub	1-Jan-03/8:57 PM
"Maybe were just close friends..." til the end ofthat stanza is pretty much the entire poem. "Rough chin" my personal favorite. I don't believe the more in love the worse the writing. Without inspiration we are lost. It just a matter of seperating the wheat from the chaff. I serious about that one stanza being the poem. Take all the other stuff away and see if it stands up.
Re: Rant by blkarak	1-Jan-03/8:50 PM
Give me some examples.
Re: strange beds (1989) by Bill Z Bub	1-Jan-03/1:52 PM
Great potential. Very sexual, great, that's what you're talking about anyway. 'Touching her halo' Is this a part of her body, or a something mystical? Please don't make a real woman into a goddess, let her be real. Take away her halo, and I believe all the rest becomes that much more meaningful. It's just my opinion, and since I really no nothing about the story behind this I may be all wrong. Anyway it turned me on.
Re: Prelude to a Legend by ThoughtfulSoul	30-Dec-02/9:22 PM
How does light fall less on deaf ears than on the ears of the hearing? You seem like a passionate person, always necessary for a poet, but your poem is too much about what you feel, and too little about what happened. Life is a confusing and difficult thing, except of course those secret moments. What has your sub-conscience created? By the way, I think it's a bad idea to place a line break after 'sub'. How about just 'This light that brakes through the bitter black, is my only compass'?
Re: The Eskimo and the fish by INTRANSIT	30-Dec-02/8:03 PM
I think the title is mis-leading, this has nothing to do with the relationship between the man and the fish. Find another title. Is this about being a provider, or is this about the freedoms of simplicity?
Re: a comment on Front, Porch, Swing. by horus8	30-Dec-02/7:12 PM
I never stopped loving you. I pretty much love everyone, when I despise someone I ignore them. I never despised you, you never gave me reason to. Although your constant bickering with Horus8 made me sick of the both of you.
Re: a comment on Front, Porch, Swing. by horus8	30-Dec-02/7:01 PM
Nothing good with Jeremi lasts forever. It comes and gos, he loves Nadine regardless of what he may have told you. Everybody loves Nadine, she is completely lovely. She's not educated but she's smart in many ways. She's a wonderful person and quite frankly an idiot for putting up with some of Jeremi's shit. I couldn't do it, and neither could you, don't fool yourself, you'd have to be somewhat submissive to be able to deal with living with Jeremi. He's moody. He might love you today and then hate you tomorrow, He will talk to you intimately one night and then not speak to you for days. Quite frankly you are making yourself look childish. I believe he's being an ass to you because you're pulling a Jerry Springer on him. You're probably making him hate you. Tell me, what is your purpose in participating on this site? Are you trying to improve your poetry skills? As they say in acting "What do you want in this scene"? Is your love going to save him from himself? "Caught in a weird situation" of his own making. Jeremi is incapable of the kind of love you expect from him.