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corners (Free verse) by rockinindividual
corners are dark sharp cold the space you cower in the place you can't get out of when you're being chased when there are footsteps in the hallway shadows outside your door when you can't back up and you can't go forward when you're crying screaming scared your heart beating your blood pulsing your nails digging into your palm your eyes closed fear on your forehead terror between your teeth that chatter and clench and gnaw there are mazes in your mind as your thoughts scatter and flee you push farther into the wall wishing you fit but your back is flat and broad and the corner is just a triangle plaster holding you prisoner your muscles ripple as you try to fit try to fit like you've been doing the whole time the whole day your whole fucking life but you don't fit that's why the doorknob is rattling and turning and the door is shaking and quaking that's why there are tears rolling down your face virgin tears for you never cry no never that's why your fingers are clutching cold hard metal that's why your ears are ringing bursting blasts that's why you're gone...

Down the ladder: Emotionally Unavailable

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.7272725
Weighted score: 5.8636365
Overall Rank: 1543
Posted: December 24, 2002 6:06 PM PST; Last modified: December 24, 2002 6:06 PM PST
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[0] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 24-Dec-02/6:14 PM | Reply
"fear on your forehead
terror between your teeth" damn fine statement here lol. wow. you took me there p&k you really dud. did i mean.
[0] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 24-Dec-02/6:18 PM | Reply
whoops sorry, maybe not. i'll fix that zero later for you.
[9] wOrnella Mutiw @ 198.81.26.167 | 24-Dec-02/7:34 PM | Reply
this is good...9
[10] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 24-Dec-02/7:48 PM | Reply
fixed.i
[8] brazen @ 65.237.116.252 | 24-Dec-02/10:30 PM | Reply
very nice. of course, carnal instinct is to fight your way out of any corner, not fade away into it...but the fighting out can always be used in an eagerly awaited sequel.
[10] god'swife @ 209.179.213.3 | 27-Dec-02/9:59 PM | Reply
I read this last, you make reading these easy and enjoyable. There are some small things that might do better if they were changed, But the telling, the telling is almost flawless. I like your poems.
[10] debased @ 24.43.45.89 | 4-Jan-03/8:19 PM | Reply
love it 10
[8] dancin_n_da_moonlite @ 64.12.116.135 | 21-Jan-05/1:47 PM | Reply
very nice..........
-mega
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