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corners (Free verse) by rockinindividual

corners are dark sharp cold the space you cower in the place you can't get out of when you're being chased when there are footsteps in the hallway shadows outside your door when you can't back up and you can't go forward when you're crying screaming scared your heart beating your blood pulsing your nails digging into your palm your eyes closed fear on your forehead terror between your teeth that chatter and clench and gnaw there are mazes in your mind as your thoughts scatter and flee you push farther into the wall wishing you fit but your back is flat and broad and the corner is just a triangle plaster holding you prisoner your muscles ripple as you try to fit try to fit like you've been doing the whole time the whole day your whole fucking life but you don't fit that's why the doorknob is rattling and turning and the door is shaking and quaking that's why there are tears rolling down your face virgin tears for you never cry no never that's why your fingers are clutching cold hard metal that's why your ears are ringing bursting blasts that's why you're gone...

god'swife 27-Dec-02/9:59 PM
I read this last, you make reading these easy and enjoyable. There are some small things that might do better if they were changed, But the telling, the telling is almost flawless. I like your poems.




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