replying on Dear M Foucault, or, How I knew our relationship was doomed by zodiac
20 Apr 2004, 7:48 AM
great, another trouble maker.
replying on Dear M Foucault, or, How I knew our relationship was doomed by zodiac
20 Apr 2004, 6:25 AM
this person goes to your school too?
replying on Ballad for a bad Irish accent by zodiac
20 Apr 2004, 6:08 AM
lol - why didn't he think you wrote this??
too funny.
too funny.
replying on innocent voyeur by nentwined
19 Apr 2004, 6:23 PM
heheh - good one.
replying on innocent voyeur by nentwined
19 Apr 2004, 6:06 PM
Fine. FINE.
I'll just go back to smoking crack then (really, I was splitting hairs)
I'll just go back to smoking crack then (really, I was splitting hairs)
replying on innocent voyeur by nentwined
19 Apr 2004, 5:46 PM
I like the poem[e] quite well up to that last line - it sounds like you are trying to avoid a question via syntax.
on stranger by francis nor capule
19 Apr 2004, 5:14 PM
"really really glad"
is you makin' fun of poetry?? are you mocking me? HUH PRETTY-BOY - are you mockin ME??
is you makin' fun of poetry?? are you mocking me? HUH PRETTY-BOY - are you mockin ME??
on innocent voyeur by nentwined
19 Apr 2004, 5:10 PM
that last line, man.
what can be done?
what can be done?
on From Treehouse To Factory by Shardik
19 Apr 2004, 5:08 PM
The set up is out of proportion to the delivery, but the language is solid enough.
Something to think about if you ever do a rewrite.
Something to think about if you ever do a rewrite.
on The Robin- A Parody by ggawrysi
19 Apr 2004, 5:00 PM
quite an ambitious ditty - but I think too long?
Still, enjoyable enough!
Still, enjoyable enough!
on Sport by MacFrantic
19 Apr 2004, 4:45 PM
olympic dogfighting?
on carnivalesque by sarah
19 Apr 2004, 3:11 PM
"painted like a dali painting" pick a painting and kill the other.
This is, otherwise, pimple - not a bad one though.
This is, otherwise, pimple - not a bad one though.
on The Flame by Fire_is_cool
19 Apr 2004, 3:09 PM
no. When I like the user name more than the poem, something is broken.
on genome home zone by sarah
19 Apr 2004, 3:08 PM
catchy, clever title.
kill "of the genome"
"with the want for a familar" to "with want of familiar" - and a very good use of "familiar", too.
I think the ending doesn't do it justice - I know you know what you mean, but the promise of the beginning isn't followed through with this confessional wrap-up.
Know what I mean - one doesn't follow the other; this ending could be tacked onto anything.
kill "of the genome"
"with the want for a familar" to "with want of familiar" - and a very good use of "familiar", too.
I think the ending doesn't do it justice - I know you know what you mean, but the promise of the beginning isn't followed through with this confessional wrap-up.
Know what I mean - one doesn't follow the other; this ending could be tacked onto anything.
on Do You Like It by hotwire
19 Apr 2004, 3:05 PM
Would that it could be top 40
replying on LOVE-ABOVE LISTE by Everyone
19 Apr 2004, 12:33 PM
:[splat]:
I'm serious, I didn't make this crap up. Change "feet" to "knees", and it will make more sense with "creeps" - unfortunately you are still stuck with the rhyme.
dunno. have a 7