Re: #20 by mikejedw	20-Apr-04/12:07 PM
haiku shouldn't ryme, roundeye (nor should they really sound "poetic"). I'm serious, I didn't make this crap up. Change "feet" to "knees", and it will make more sense with "creeps" - unfortunately you are still stuck with the rhyme. dunno. have a 7
Re: questions by ggawrysi	20-Apr-04/11:58 AM
the answer, btw, is always "with mirrors"
Re: questions by ggawrysi	20-Apr-04/7:49 AM
is "How was it done?"
Re: a comment on Dear M Foucault, or, How I knew our relationship was doomed by zodiac	20-Apr-04/7:48 AM
great, another trouble maker.
Re: a comment on Dear M Foucault, or, How I knew our relationship was doomed by zodiac	20-Apr-04/6:25 AM
this person goes to your school too?
Re: a comment on Ballad for a bad Irish accent by zodiac	20-Apr-04/6:08 AM
lol - why didn't he think you wrote this?? too funny.
Re: a comment on innocent voyeur by nentwined	19-Apr-04/6:23 PM
heheh - good one.
Re: a comment on innocent voyeur by nentwined	19-Apr-04/6:06 PM
Fine. FINE. I'll just go back to smoking crack then (really, I was splitting hairs)
Re: Laundry by mindsigns	19-Apr-04/6:00 PM
This is a "concrete", and they are so few and, well, f a r between, that I'm gonna give you an 8.
Re: a comment on innocent voyeur by nentwined	19-Apr-04/5:46 PM
I like the poem[e] quite well up to that last line - it sounds like you are trying to avoid a question via syntax.
Re: stranger by francis nor capule	19-Apr-04/5:14 PM
"really really glad" is you makin' fun of poetry?? are you mocking me? HUH PRETTY-BOY - are you mockin ME??
Re: innocent voyeur by nentwined	19-Apr-04/5:10 PM
that last line, man. what can be done?
Re: From Treehouse To Factory by Shardik	19-Apr-04/5:08 PM
The set up is out of proportion to the delivery, but the language is solid enough. Something to think about if you ever do a rewrite.
Re: The Robin- A Parody by ggawrysi	19-Apr-04/5:00 PM
quite an ambitious ditty - but I think too long? Still, enjoyable enough!
Re: Sport by MacFrantic	19-Apr-04/4:45 PM
olympic dogfighting?
Re: carnivalesque by sarah	19-Apr-04/3:11 PM
"painted like a dali painting" pick a painting and kill the other. This is, otherwise, pimple - not a bad one though.
Re: The Flame by Fire_is_cool	19-Apr-04/3:09 PM
no. When I like the user name more than the poem, something is broken.
Re: genome home zone by sarah	19-Apr-04/3:08 PM
catchy, clever title. kill "of the genome" "with the want for a familar" to "with want of familiar" - and a very good use of "familiar", too. I think the ending doesn't do it justice - I know you know what you mean, but the promise of the beginning isn't followed through with this confessional wrap-up. Know what I mean - one doesn't follow the other; this ending could be tacked onto anything.
Re: Do You Like It by hotwire	19-Apr-04/3:05 PM
Would that it could be top 40
Re: a comment on LOVE-ABOVE LISTE by Everyone	19-Apr-04/12:33 PM
:[splat]: