regarding some deleted poem...	11-Feb-04/12:33 PM
Kept my attention, no small feat for such a block of text.
Re: Lasting Forever by angel_uy	12-Feb-04/3:45 AM
convincingly conveyed hope.
Re: Insomnia by dreamsdiefirst	15-Feb-04/2:39 PM
five seven then five do you need an abucus? I counted this thrice. actually, you can play with the syllable count - I just like posting that when I get the chance. ;o) Did you do it on purpose? If so, why not just stick the other syllable ("I") in there? With "in som ni a" you are basically halfway there; that's a tough one.
Re: The birdboy that was (Icarus) by Y2kSlamPoet	15-Feb-04/5:46 PM
This thought of icarus being converted to fuel some other thought or inspiration is a good one. Would be worthy of a poem with it as a central theme. The idea of it can be used in other similar tales - like christ's body used as fertilizer, perhaps (would have to work around the logic problem of the whole stored in a cave thing, though). As for the rest of this poem, it smacks of an attack on someone, though I don't think the reader is given a solid idea of who - a personal mission perhaps?
regarding some deleted poem...	15-Feb-04/5:47 PM
less thAn the spit...
regarding some deleted poem...	15-Feb-04/5:49 PM
cute.
Re: The Prophetical Eye of Dreams by Don-Quixote	15-Feb-04/5:52 PM
Very sexual. Freud would have a nice time with this. the language is good, but I think "initiated" is better toned down as "started". The rest works, imho.
Re: First Shot by lastobelus	15-Feb-04/5:55 PM
"as calm as shock"
Re: Respiration for a Lack of Dizzyness by fevriere	17-Feb-04/6:30 PM
eeenteresting...
Re: Your Beauty by Birdman42s	17-Feb-04/7:30 PM
I very much like the last stanza - the rest, though nicely said, doesn't say too much that is original. Almost ironically demeaning it its mundaneness; near satire (would be a more interesting piece from that angle, would it not?) Btw - have you studied the word "pretty"? It really is noteworthy.
Re: The daisy-chain girl by richa	17-Feb-04/7:56 PM
You make me work so hard with your poetry. I understand dandelions and litter (putting a flowerpot over them for extended cultivation). and I can *almost* see your connections with the measure, the clock, the stepping; these incremental units. They are, supposedly, linked somehow. You say "spriritual vs mathematic" - have you been reading Spinoza before bedtime again??? Maybe some Tipler?
Re: The daisy-chain girl by richa	17-Feb-04/7:58 PM
For making me work -10-
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Feb-04/8:23 PM
"The covers stir over there sandwiched content." nice! (make it "their", though)
regarding some deleted poem...	18-Feb-04/7:13 PM
Very sad. Rest assured you will get over this, and the three I'm giving it (as I will mine).
Re: The Angry Bush by wilco	18-Feb-04/8:18 PM
I like the thinking behind this.
Re: Nature by dreamsdiefirst	18-Feb-04/8:18 PM
it is uplifting.
regarding some deleted poem...	18-Feb-04/8:20 PM
WEll, I like this: "My sober mind an empty cup, and now I drink to fill it up." yes, some of the rhymes are, ah - easy. But somehow it retains a spark of ingenuity.
Re: Poe ét tri by Blue Magpie	18-Feb-04/8:23 PM
I was really hoping this would go someplace other than back to the beginning. It shows some promise - I suggest you try and wrap it up somehow. As it sits, its a seven in my mind, tops. could easily be more.
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Feb-04/8:57 AM
I like this one. am I interpreting correctly that it is in quotes up to "But"?
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Feb-04/4:10 PM
An iron sentiment clearly wrought, if not poetically so. Hmmm, what to do? Maybe you could attach some imagery to some of these list items? I think quite a few poems, actually, will fall from these sentiments.