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The Angry Bush

by wilco

Member since 2004 · Posted 18 Feb 2004 · 8 comments

If I were an angry bush I'd have one all consuming wish To be the lord of all the land and show the world my mighty hand. and if I were an angry bush I'd know nothing of words and such So I'd make a language all my own and speak them with a tepid tone. If I were an angry bush I'd need some oil to make my push I'd gather men from near and far And send them off to fight a war. and if I were an angry bush I'd care for you so very much So much so I'd tell you lies And with the world I'd cut all ties.

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8 comments

[8] Shuushin 18-Feb-04/8:18 PM Reply
I like the thinking behind this.
[8] richa 19-Feb-04/7:12 AM Reply
Quite cute. The last verse goes backwards though. I thought trouble was brewing. Then you tell us you are going to cut off ties - doesn't really follow.
[n/a] wilco › richa 19-Feb-04/2:01 PM Reply
Basically, it refers to telling the rest of the world to fuck off...when they didn't want to go to war....
[8] zodiac 19-Feb-04/7:17 AM Reply
I think the last verse is okay, but it shouldn't be the last. Switch it with the third.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 19-Feb-04/2:04 PM Reply
I feel this could be improved by substituting the final line for one ending in 'eyes'.
[9] Bachus 19-Feb-04/3:09 PM Reply
I would go with DA's suggestion, but add the word "Whale" before 'eyes'. Because, I for one, am tired of seeing when the whales cannot. Oh, and I'd capitalize Bush to add historical oomph.

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[10] Bill Z Bub 26-Nov-05/3:06 PM Reply
If I could impeach an angry bush...

Love it.

10 for the politics alone.
[5] Edna Sweetlove 23-May-06/10:32 AM Reply
Not very subtle but the message is OK.