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The Angry Bush (Free verse) by wilco

If I were an angry bush I'd have one all consuming wish To be the lord of all the land and show the world my mighty hand. and if I were an angry bush I'd know nothing of words and such So I'd make a language all my own and speak them with a tepid tone. If I were an angry bush I'd need some oil to make my push I'd gather men from near and far And send them off to fight a war. and if I were an angry bush I'd care for you so very much So much so I'd tell you lies And with the world I'd cut all ties.

zodiac 19-Feb-04/7:17 AM
I think the last verse is okay, but it shouldn't be the last. Switch it with the third.




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