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Insomnia (Haiku) by dreamsdiefirst Going for the sleep,
Wish could beat this insomnia,
While counting the sheep!
Up the ladder:
My Culture (Final Version)
Down the ladder:
My Village
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 3.0
Posted: February 15, 2004 12:25 AM PST; Last modified: February 15, 2004 12:25 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.905148 Overall Rank: 9746 Comments:
There's nothing like a good poem about insomnia. And this is nothing like one. Bomm and, indeed, boom, as Basil Brush might say.
Thank you - now I know who basil brush is!
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do you need an abucus?
I counted this thrice.
actually, you can play with the syllable count - I just like posting that when I get the chance.
;o)
Did you do it on purpose? If so, why not just stick the other syllable ("I") in there?
With "in som ni a" you are basically halfway there; that's a tough one.
A dictionary will help, of course - www.dictionary.com, but even with that, some folks parse the syllable count differently anyway. ). Having a feel for how one word is pronounced it might be useful to see what words rhyme with it, so another good resource for you might be www.rhymezone.com (but don't rely on it!).
rather than counting syllables in your [haiku] strive for an economy of words - each having a purpose leading up to the final, cutting, word.
the articles (the, this), while helping your syllable count, don't add value toward the meaning.
oh - and haiku, in english anyway (if such a thing exists), don't usually rhyme. Not that I'm not a fan of those who walk a different path. Maybe something other than an endryhme -
*insomnia*
Sleep, a distant farm
crops of roosters fully ripe
flee before my sheep.
no rhyming -
and 5-7-5 is purely up to you. There is a long history of haiku that is worth researching, suffice to say, what most folks post as "haiku" - aint.