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Retail (Free verse) by Wakeboarder20
Well I forget the day I forgot your name. I don’t even recall the day we met. But I don’t even think it really matters anymore. So when you see me laying in bed. Do me a favor dear and pretend I’m dead. I’m used to not seeing things for what I’ve heard they’re supposed to be. Maybe I’m just blind to the obvious. I’m a simple man worried about the future and when I’ll get to sooner rather then later. Well I forget the day I forgot my name. I don’t even think it really matters anyway. I’m a colorless man. Blind to subtleties and what I say I believe. Just forget I’m even here. I don’t even remember what my point was.

Up the ladder: Just a Mistake
Down the ladder: Someday

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.0
Weighted score: 4.905148
Overall Rank: 9749
Posted: August 28, 2006 11:52 AM PDT; Last modified: October 15, 2006 9:58 PM PDT
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Comments:
[8] Ranger @ 81.158.153.184 | 29-Aug-06/12:14 PM | Reply
Really good read. I swear I've seen the same title somewhere else before though.
[9] nypoet22 @ 72.144.83.149 | 12-Oct-06/5:43 PM | Reply
i like the structure. i agree with ranger about the name.
[2] Sing4Jesus! @ 85.210.247.54 | 13-Oct-06/3:53 PM | Reply
Not much about Jesus here, is there?
[n/a] Wakeboarder20 @ 71.227.248.140 > Sing4Jesus! | 13-Oct-06/6:58 PM | Reply
Um...no? I take it that if it's not about Jesus, it's bad in your book? Ok, gotcha.
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