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Your Beauty (Free verse) by Birdman42s
She is beautiful, so very beautiful Just like a winter's shining landscape, As delicate as the petals of a daisy, And as freely as the eagle soaring against the blue Her eyes are as mysterious as the calm sea Everything about her is so very precious, More precious than all the gems in the world Her soul is the essence of the sky and earth, Her feelings are a volcano that is yet to explode Her smile is the smile of lost innocence. Pain vibrates deep inside of her gentle heart. A lock shuts in the disturbed thoughts of her mind, A mind with as many roads as the world has. I look at her and I see a pure truth, Like looking at a clear night sky, Millions of stars twinkle within her. She is beauty as I defined it, She is perfect, imperfections make her so. She is my best friend, and I love her, I love her although, not because. And I would give up all the things that I think are pretty If only I can hold her beauty close to me, For she is everything in this world, And I have found a world in her.

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.5
Weighted score: 5.0596013
Overall Rank: 6727
Posted: February 17, 2004 1:27 PM PST; Last modified: February 17, 2004 1:27 PM PST
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[n/a] deleted user @ 24.222.81.233 | 17-Feb-04/2:46 PM | Reply
Good for a one-armer.
[8] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 17-Feb-04/7:30 PM | Reply
I very much like the last stanza - the rest, though nicely said, doesn't say too much that is original.

Almost ironically demeaning it its mundaneness; near satire (would be a more interesting piece from that angle, would it not?)

Btw - have you studied the word "pretty"? It really is noteworthy.
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