regarding some deleted poem...	24-Feb-04/8:25 AM
nicely done.
Re: Good King Brownceslas by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	25-Feb-04/10:05 AM
Thank you for including the link to the tune - I was struggling to amermer it. crap - the link is too busy; will try later. Christmas is forever improved.
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Feb-04/8:10 PM
Quite nice (espec. S4) till the last. then I got confuz-ed. Settle for a nine?
Re: Dream of a Vanilla Sky by smlink84	27-Feb-04/4:24 AM
Quick note - you don't need to put the title in the body as well.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Feb-04/7:22 AM
is quite good, only some slight moments where it sounds a slave to the rhyme.
Re: The Unholiest Sonnet Ever by horus8	27-Feb-04/7:07 PM
where is the unholy part? Moves along purty well.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Feb-04/7:39 PM
is it the boogie monster??
Re: Lifes work by richa	27-Feb-04/7:43 PM
that last bit - it's visual to be sure, but think I liked the other version? The squirrel completely freezes the ability for me to look around and consider the setting for me, and that image is what I'm left with. If that was the intent then kudos, but its quite a departure from the previous version.
Re: The Worst First by MacFrantic	27-Feb-04/7:45 PM
Sorry, but it just seems like a rhyming exercise; I think most of us here, yourself included, could probably do one of these every 12 minutes.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Feb-04/7:47 PM
This line: "It dies now dies into sleep. " - is good. The rest - there are so many ways this is said, and the way you have here is about half of them.
Re: Two words by bondjedi	27-Feb-04/7:48 PM
okay, I'll buy it.
Re: Life by NobodysSon	27-Feb-04/7:50 PM
I'm thinking this works, but I almost got tripped up about 2/3rds way in; maybe could be trimmed a bit? I really wish it was something beside the word LIFE at the end.
Re: beef flavored ramen by ThePariahDog	27-Feb-04/7:53 PM
good observations, well put.
Re: Seven by toker071	28-Feb-04/7:21 AM
Tonka trucks, pigtails you can use my favorite one - castles in the sand
Re: Little Tounge by Figure 8	28-Feb-04/7:35 AM
rename it with someting to do with fire and you'll almost have something. or a dragon. and add another stanza. btw, "mouth" (as you spell it) should be "muthge"
Re: simply missing by daggatolar	28-Feb-04/4:09 PM
I really like this: "Who is after me My own me after me" lots of originality here.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Feb-04/4:54 PM
summer approaches celebrate with poetry - but this is a list. Okay, it is a good list though - what does the last one mean?
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Feb-04/10:07 AM
shocking, actually.
Re: The Ghost of Sarah Gyllenhall by wilco	29-Feb-04/10:11 AM
works for me.
Re: terraza pizza by daniella	29-Feb-04/5:23 PM
You didn't like the kitten?? What was wrong with the cute kitty?