Re: Try, Please Try by Spindle	29-Mar-04/5:45 PM
Points for hitting a universal emotion.
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Mar-04/11:26 PM
Not bad H, not bad at all.
Re: Another Fucking Slow, Sad Song by wilco	29-Mar-04/11:30 PM
yep. sure is.
Re: A Flower for Monet by Shuushin	30-Mar-04/10:53 AM
HEY guys, THANKS. Been in training most of the day and I popped out to check messages - horry cow. Thanks for the good words - much appreciated!!
Re: Once Upon A Time ( a senyru ) by Mr Pig	30-Mar-04/11:18 AM
a thousand points for calling a duck a duck (senryu vs haiku). tanka you.
Re: I Married an Infectious Woman (My Love, 'Futility') by SupremeDreamer	31-Mar-04/5:33 PM
I like "mayhaps". I guess I'm not much into more ass humor at the moment. It goes together well enough.
Re: Bread Wine And Chocolate by Caducus	31-Mar-04/5:34 PM
A reference to easter?
Re: Darkness Falls On Tenement Twelve by Mona Lisa	31-Mar-04/5:37 PM
I will like this so much more when it has the word "concrete" in it only once. Watch your preposition use; too much - especially with so many conjunctions (but/yet). Pretty solid sentiment just the same though.
Re: A country called Cha by richa	31-Mar-04/5:49 PM
Richa mein freund - I grow familiar with your Australian abstractions; good stuff. nits- "beared"? bore? "entered the picture" - seems like a missed poetic opportunity.
Re: Ideals drown Worries by skaskowski	31-Mar-04/5:53 PM
well done - okay, I don't like "sticky" with "Stuck". Have a ten anyway.
Re: stains by calliope	31-Mar-04/6:02 PM
Pretty nice, calliope. This is an entirely different style (etc.), but have you read "the old fools" by philip larkin? http://plagiarist.com/poetry/?wid=4879 oh, I just read baughworm's crit on the title - agreed.
regarding some deleted poem...	31-Mar-04/6:06 PM
Good thought.
Re: Twilight Affair by thepinkbunnyofdoom	31-Mar-04/6:12 PM
"opera of obscenities" - nice. Yes, an edit once the emotion has leveled out a bit would be good for it; a nice distillation.
Re: Eyes by tre	31-Mar-04/6:16 PM
couple typos to fix, i think (intentional or not). Kindof a different slant on an old theme; kudos.
regarding some deleted poem...	31-Mar-04/6:22 PM
have a 10.
Re: metaphor by jsd	31-Mar-04/7:53 PM
a lyric. Tangled is better than mixed, anyday. welcome.
Re: The Hell With Growing Up by wilco	31-Mar-04/8:01 PM
I think it represents a good snapshot of a frame of mind in the moment just before one "grows up" (whatever that is) - this exact feeling. You may be surprised, and perhaps relieved, to know that there is still a bit to go and you won't spend your entire life wishing for misspent youth. As a slight aside, there is a recent study where folks aged 65 and older were asked what their favorite age was - 40-41 was the most cited result.
Re: Astronomical by DeadtotheWorld	31-Mar-04/8:02 PM
I'm sorry but I have trouble with the format. Enought that I have trouble getting through it. I think it might have something to do with the sushi I just had.
Re: Tuna and sweetcorn by Bobjim	31-Mar-04/8:03 PM
woah. thats deep.
regarding some deleted poem...	31-Mar-04/8:06 PM
nice line: "wheat in a ruckus with the wind" This one _really_ slows time.